It has a pace and really a well written chapter.The language is vivid and readers do expect a twist in future but amount of dialogues has killed the beauty of the story.I think the right balance between dialogues and narration is required here.Vocabulary is rich and sentences are varied. Keep it up.
wow! It reminds us the nature around us.The imagery is vivid and writing flows like a stream in a valley.You also remind us our vulnerability to weather especially the severe one and I think the gratefulness you have embraced is worth praising.Wish you good luck for your future writings.
Excellent use of metaphorical language has really gained my interest in this poem. You have innate ability to write poems.I can feel the words you have used and the essence of the message is very loud in a silent way. Well done and congratulations for this deep poem. Keep it up.
Well written and the description is great. Your writing flows well.You have a talent to write action stories. I can picture every moment put in the action.Well thought vocabulary and good pace make this story a nice piece of literature.I think you should keep up with writing such good pieces.
Oh boy! Great detailing the words are like pearls and the style is unique in its own way. You are an accomplished writer I wish I could write like you.The erotic part has its own beauty.It does embarrass you and at the same time you enjoy it fully. You have a real talent.
Wow!Emotions flow like a river in a valley, swift and pure. You have a talent to hook the readers. The choice of words is great and contrast of you have drawn two sides of the personality is awesome. How we all can be strong and as well as frail in different times.I think you have done justice to your work and keep it up as you have a great potential to write nice poems.
It has given me an encouragement to keep on writing. Your writing flows well and you have a natural talent to write. Do try writing some prose as well if you have not written any yet. You have provoked the desire in us to grab the natural beauty around us and I feel like writing one.
WOW!It is erotic in its own way.Many things understated but it is a matter of style and I think you should keep it as it is. Your are a good writer and you should try some other genres as well.Keep it up.It was an enjoyable write up and the contrast you have drawn of frailness versus strength is remarkable.
WOW! I wish all of us could be like her. I can see irony here which about the cruelty of this world.What do we expect from the world is portrayed well.I like the rhyming and the way feelings are aroused in us to be a better human beings is really worth appreciation. Nice work
WOW!you are a talented writer. The details are absolutely interesting and hook the readers' attention. Well done. But it may need a twist that should leave readers shocked.It is just a suggestion. The story has a flow and your style is really interesting.
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