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Review by JiveAardvark28 Author IconMail Icon
Rated: 13+ | (3.5)
I really like this story. It has passion and excitement, along with a sincere love for something not many people could come to love.

However, I felt that it was a little short and didn't really have an ending, but everyone is a critic, right?
I would have loved to read more of her story, know more about her. I'm sad it was as short and lacking detail as it is.

Otherwise, great story line, I'm just aching for more!
Keep Writing,
L.
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Review by JiveAardvark28 Author IconMail Icon
Rated: 13+ | (4.5)
This story was beautiful.
I love the way you described every detail, it made me feel as if I was actually there, in her place.
I love your writing style, its almost Nicholas Sparks-ie in your description of things. I'm personally crazy about love stories, and you have definately hit a home run.

Great Work!
Lola
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Review by JiveAardvark28 Author IconMail Icon
Rated: 13+ | (4.5)
I really liked this story!
It took me completely by surprise, although I wished it had been a little longer, I'm dying for more!
If you are curious about what you could change, I would definately advise a grammar check, but that's just me being obbsessive compulsive. haha!
Keep up the awesome work!
Lola
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