From the very first sentence, you had me hooked!
The wonderful way you descriped their love was something I could intimatly feel, and respond too.
I was "pulled" into the story even further as it progressed. You describe the whole atmosphere within the story so one understands the reality for Robert and Lisa, and one could almost forget it's just a story!
You want to reach out and console both Robert and Lisa. Then BAM...Robert walks away with the ability to "reset his emotion chip" !
Took me from forgeting it's just a story, to WOW I really need to read this one again.
Loved it, Loved it, Loved it!
Keep working on your writing, you are an impressive story teller!
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