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Rated: 13+ | (4.0)
a great read, the word choice was a little confusing during my first read since hurtle usually refers to an obstacte of some sort and not a crowd hurling rocks. I would sugest replacing hurtle with hail or rain, but it is up to you since it might have been the appropriate word for the time period.
Similarly try rewording the first and second verses to allow for more flow, remember to let it sound natural, the words should come easily to the reader and draw out the most from the story.
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