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Review by conformonot Author IconMail Icon
Rated: E | (4.0)
I really liked this story.. the way he interacted with each3rd grader, and the smart quips he gave in response.

I Think Turnbuckle Hookeye could be a series of books if he isn't already and the name is surely resonant.

The only thing that was a bit disappointing was that he was going to tell them the story, and they all gathered around and then nothing.. they all left wondering if it could be true.

Perhaps you intended that, so the reader could make up what they thought he told them... fub story either way.
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Review by conformonot Author IconMail Icon
Rated: 13+ | (2.5)
The story from what I can gather has merit. The character building and descriptions are pretty basic. I think that taking the writing a bit slower and reading each paragraph thoroughly before considering it complete could really help you. Keep up the writing I know you are just getting started, and thank you for sharing.
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Rated: E | (4.0)
I like the flow of the poem.. how darkness creeps, and then cowers to the light, then still waiting to creep in again. Its thought provoking. Thank you for sharing!
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