Hello Zheila! You recently reviewed one of my stories and I thought why not check your portfolio as a reward . I enjoyed reading it and hope you find this feedback useful.
Overall Impression:
Although it is not a usual story, there are no dialogues no real characters it immediately catches your attention and you simply have to read it through, and it a very good read as you really easily believe that they are facts that are presented here.
Plot:
A review of some documents dealing with the crash landing of an UFO in Roswell.
Style and Voice:
The story presents all details with references to sources that makes you believe they are facts.
Scene/Setting:
The story deals with the artifacts found after an UFO crash landing in the desert of Roswell and how they helped earthly scientist to improve technology.
With references to 'real' sources the story makes you really believe that they are facts presented from the foundings after the UFO landing.
Characters:
Referred as real persons that make the story more realistic.
Grammar and Mechanics:
No grammatic errors spotted.
Suggestions:
I might say that with the usage of some extra lines the story would be more easily readable.
Hello! You once reviewed one of my stories and I randomly chose a story from your portfolio to read. I really enjoyed reading it and hope you find this feedback useful.
Overall Impression:
A sad story about the opportunities we miss sometime in our lives and only years later found out that in reality it was a blessing in disguise. I liked how you built the whole storyline starting as an idyllic scenery to something totally different
Plot:
Miranda, a small town in Texas.
Style and Voice:
Very distanced only telling us facts of the life of the 'perfect' couple
Scene/Setting:
After introducing the narrator and the ex cheer leader it starts immediately with the bloody scene after Jenny took revenge for the years of abuse. I found it a very strong idea that makes the story a real winner.
Characters:
Although with very few words but you succeded in creating real, all over authentic characters
Dialog:
Not too much but enough to keep the necessary tension.
Hi Iva,
this is a beautiful sad song, I really loved it. I wrote 'song' on purpose, even if it is a free verse it has a sweet melancholy that carries you away and I could almost hear it sung by someone accompanied by a sole guitar. On the one hand you are sad because you lost someone you loved but on the other hand you have your imagination and all the little things that carry you back to him. I liked how autumn encloses your 25 lines of feelings in a poem that touches the reader and make him think of all the people he lost on the way... people he loved.
Very nice peace of poem, thank you for sharing!
Keep on writing!
Take care
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