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Rated: 18+ | (4.5)
I liked this a lot. It was very expressive without seeming like it was dragging. I'm glad it'll be a series, I'll be reading the rest as they come! A couple of pieces of advice; In the beginning, you say Marcus decided to drive his car into the river, but it seems kind of casual, you might want to put a little more emphasis on his near-suicide. Could just be speculation, it's your call of course. Other than that just a bit of proofreading. (I'm sure I need a ton of that in mine too) Thanks for a great read, keep it coming!
~The best writers make the fewest words go the longest way.~ --anonymous
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