Wow! I loved this from beginning to finish; I couldn't stop reading! I'm really into Guardian Angels in my stories, so I really liked this, it was something to look up to! I think you have a lot of varied vocab and your descriptions' are so amazing! I could almost feel Percy. I like how you wrote your dialogue and to be honest I can't really think of many improvements so well done :D
Wow, this poem is amazing! I love writing from the inspiration of my dreams, because I can always remember them very well. I think your vocab is great, and I love how you put that quote at the very end. I also love the way you created the image so easily in our heads of your place. Thank you for letting me read this, it was great. Happy Writing! (:
I really loved this! I liked all the different vocab and rhymes, and it also made you feel emotion at the same time, [which is hard for me as I hardly ever read poetry]. I like the reputition of the title because it makes a valid point of how the boy really wants his father. Very well done, I can't see any mistakes! :)
This is a really sweet poem. I like how you made everything seem to be properly LIVING, like the moon and the sun. I like how you've referred to him as an angel, because angels' are beyond perfect. In the poem, it makes the person writing it seem very lucky to have that special someone because you make him seem that he's always there, no matter what, to look after you and you're always thinking about him. Good job! (:
Wow! I was really surprised because that was very enjoyable to read! I loved the start of the writing, where you described the mans' facial features and what it felt like when he touched her. You made it seem very wintery and at first I thought the man was almost a ghost as he whipped in and out of sight and it made him seem very mysterious. I liked the fact that he'd risk his life to save hers' even though they've barely even met but maybe there's something else there to do with that. Maybe he's been watching her or something, I don't know. I liked how you desribed everything and it gives you a very strong image in your head of where she might live. I gave it 4.0/5.0 overall. (:
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