Very cool story. I like the idea, even if the end is a bit predictable and anti-climatic. It just seems that you decided to wrap it up suddenly and the recursion of the virus idea a second time doesn’t quite seem right. Also, the passage of time after the first virus attack seems too matter of fact. There is no actual feeling of time passing. Nevertheless, very cool story and very enjoyable!
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