This does grab one's attention. The description of the room and the figure drew me out a little. "The room had dull grey walls, and was poorly lit, aiding in the figure's concealment."
Perhaps - The few shadows thrown by the low light blended into the dull grey walls. Its concealing protection obscured the figure from the scientists' view. Or something along that line. It is your story so you choose the words.
I truly enjoyed this brief glimpse into your story and look forward to reading the subsequent chapters you have posted on Writers.com. If you have not yet picked up where you left off you are depriving an audience of a seemingly good story and that readership covers a wide spectrum when you offer a good story with well-drawn characters. Without having read any further I feel safe in making this statement.
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