This story shows how taking a negative situation and turning it into an opportunity can lead to success. The protagonist's determination to use their skills to help others paid off, and they continued to persevere despite setbacks. The positive outcome demonstrates the value of trusting oneself and taking risks.
This patriotic poem paints a vivid image of a summer night filled with the joys of community, family, and tradition. The imagery of the fireworks, the smell of fried chicken, and the laughter of children creates a warm and inviting atmosphere. The poem celebrates the joy of being an American and the shared experiences that bring people together.
This short poem evokes a sense of peace through the contrast between the tension of waiting for a storm and the gentle release of a quiet rain. The imagery of the rain renewing life and the smell of the dirt is soothing, bringing a sense of calm and tranquility
The poem tells a story of a dilemma that the speaker, a maiden, faces in choosing between two men, a lawyer and a poet. The poem uses a simple and straightforward structure with a clear rhyming pattern. However, the characters of the two men are stereotypical and the poem lacks depth and complexity. The ending is abrupt and does not provide a satisfying resolution to the conflict. Overall, the poem lacks nuance and could benefit from more developed characters and a deeper exploration of the speaker's feelings and motivations.
The poem has a melancholic tone with a focus on passing time and feelings of loss and solitude. The use of imagery is effective in conveying the emotions, but the lack of clear structure and inconsistent rhyming can make the poem feel disjointed and difficult to follow at times. However, the repeated mention of the blue heaven provides a sense of hope and a glimmer of light in the midst of the darkness.
This short poem captures the mixed emotions that come with the summer season. The author describes the conflicting feelings of loneliness and happiness, and the physical sensations of heat and humidity that can be both enervating and uncomfortable. The reference to "Korean summer hell" adds a specific cultural context, and the use of alliteration and rhyme adds a musical quality to the writing. The poem could be expanded with more sensory details or personal reflections, but as it stands, it offers a brief snapshot of the author's experience of summer.
This short piece of poetry paints a serene and romantic scene under the moonlight. The imagery of the moon waking for the night and kissing the sky is enchanting. The depiction of the lily in the pond embracing her lover and flying to their abode creates a sense of mystical and magical romance.
The mention of the lurking frog and the whistling wind brings a touch of nature to the poem. The use of the pronoun 'her' for the moon and the sand dunes adds a personification element to the poem, making it more relatable.
The final line "waiting for someone relentlessly she sheds her light and wakes the day" creates a sense of longing and hope. The moon becomes a symbol of hope for someone waiting for their loved one, and its light brings a new day.
Overall, this poem creates a romantic and calming atmosphere with its beautiful and vivid imagery.
Wow, this sure gave me perspective. It was very well written and I could not spot and punctuation or grammatical errors, so Kudos to that!
Thank you so much for sharing this. I really appreciate it. Helped me feel safer at a difficult time. Keep inspiring and keep writing!
Hey Violet Brenner
Quite an interesting story you wrote up there. Your grammar and punctuation seem impeccable too. I liked how you touched upon the concept of how death works. I suggest you reduce the word count and enter the 75 word contest with this. "Invalid Item" It has potential. Or you can increase the word count and make story out of it. Whichever works for you.
Hi Itchybarn!
Nice story! Haven't read anything like it in a long time.This reminded me of how timeless and fun games can be! I did notice how few places haven't been punctuated properly, but that wasn't much and can be overlooked. Is it safe to assume that you're a minecraft veteran, going by your creeper portfolio cover?
Anyhow, Keep writing!
Hey SLITHER12!
Really enjoyed your puzzle! I am not much of a derby country fan, but it was still fun and I got really excited every time I saw a name I recognized. Anyways, nice job! I'll stop by your portfolio when I can! Happy spooky month! Keep Writing!
Hello, Dr M C Gupta! This is a very beautiful and meaningful poem about God and the true way one can serve him. I really enjoyed the first paragraph, where you talk about how fate and destiny cannot be carved. The way you put that was very unique and I haven't seen it before. Anyways, great poem! Keep writing!
Hey there!
I found the poem interesting and would like to share my opinions on it. Remember that this is my point of view, so take what you can use and lose what you can't.
First impression: This is about your lover and how he is trying to understand you, but you can't tell if he genuinely cares of feels for your cause, even if he's trying to be there for you constantly.
What I liked: Its an intriguing concept that you're trying to encapsulate and I applause you for making a story out of this. I never thought of a relationship in this way. Kudos to you!
Some things I think need to be changed:
The poem is unclear and cloudy. Maybe you are trying to get the reader to crack the code and make something out of it themselves, but that intent is not clear either. I noticed many errors and I'm not sure if they are intentional or meant to be a play on words. If it's the latter, then maybe you've done a great job and I'm too dense to figure out what 'I'm envious on my lover' instead of '....of my lover' means.
Depending on what your intention was, it is either a job done incredibly well or just a total mess. I'd recommend you proofread your poem once. If you find the time, please mail me and tell me what this poem really is about.
I apologize for being this harsh. Please don't take it too heart. I too am a budding writer and I learnt that while frank reviews can hurt, they help you grow faster than fake but nice reviews.
Hello! This was a very different poem from most others I have read on WdC. It speaks to the reader in many varying ways and shows them a poet's point of view of the beauty of nature and beyond. Wonderfully well written. It also explains to the reader the importance of penance of sorts and that the starry sky we see maybe our final destination. Great job! Keep going!
Hello!
'Maze' was a deep and well written prose that many lost souls can relate with. Being dumped is not easy and love seems too overrated at times like this. The jumble of thoughts is natural and beautiful laid out in your writing. I suggest you work on your punctuation, proofread before posting and space it out a little so that it won't look like a block of text.
Anyhow, I hope whoever was being spoken about found their way out of the maze. Great work! Keep going!
This was an interesting prose, written almost like it wanted to be published. A cute and enjoyable story which is rather relatable. Great job. I'm glad you could overcome the truma. The grammar and punctuation were perfect. On the whole, great job! Keep going!
Wow! This is really skilled photography... Being a bit of a photographer myself, I do have a little idea about this stuff. did you take it yourself? I liked your angle quiet a bit. the shadow and the light are just right, with the hole right in the middle. Great work, keep going!
I thoroughly enjoyed reading this. No one ever touches upon the emotions and feelings of sportspersons and athletes in such detail. Hats off to you for doing such a great job on writing so well upon such a topic. The way the elements that the spectators fail to see such as hardwork and determination have been put forth is very interesting. Your grammar and punctuation was impeccable.
I thoroughly enjoyed reading this. No one ever touches upon the pain and misery animals face due to human greed. Hats off to you for doing such a great job on writing so well upon such a topic. The personification of the dragon was very well done. An untold love story of Loch Ness. Your grammar and punctuation was impeccable. The significance of the line "When I'm emotional, the fire is me" is an interesting double metaphor because firstly, the dragon breathes fire when emotional, and also, man, when emotional, is angry, hence the fire. Great job!
This little poem reminds us of the never ending and depressing cycle of life, but at the same time, 'the glimmer of first light' gives us hope and reminds us that every day brings something new and takes away the pain. An intriguing metaphor conveyed in the short brevity of 24 syllabus! Bravo!
That's very sweet! Will definitely inspire someone during tough times! Why don't you build on it? It can be very inspirational, given your writing skills...
Keep going!
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