This story has great bones. Some of the sentences appear to have little purpose, for example 'Sam did not give a reason for wanting to take me home, he just asked whereas Jaden did.' and its a bit wordy in parts, nothing a great edit can't fix tho. There is a bit of a Twilight feel too, so I am looking forward to being suprised soon. Great work.
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