Ok, so what was this about? I did not understand this one. I think the son and daughter were trying to figure out something about their mother. I see at the end they found that their mother had a male's name instead of a female's name. This does not mean that their mother is not a female. This only tells me that her parents gave her a masculine name. I feel that you should make it a bit longer. You should put some conclusive evidence in it that identifies the mother as a male. I feel that the characters should find their mother and their mother should also reveal her true masculine form, or should be on the verge to do it. This wasn't bad though.
Lol, I kind of feel betrayed. I feel like you, the writer, wanted me to feel sorry for the pet owner. Then, at the end the owner lets the cat go again. I would say kitty. But, after 12 years, that animal's no longer a baby. The owner might view the animal as a baby. But, that cat ain't no baby no more. I thought, fairytale, until I got to then end. I feel like there is no reason for the Mrs. Smith to let the cat out for a bathroom break. Especially during the winter time, lol. I felt that it was quite rediculous. I was worried about the cat and the Mrs. Smith in the begining. I felt that the cat had got lost, and walked through something bile as it searched for its home. I felt that Mrs. Smith was going to start crying her heart out if she had to clean the bile off of that cat. I also felt that she was going to be deeply depressed when the cat did not return after those three hours. Then, when you said looking for Fluffy had been her daily routine for the past 12 years, I felt like I almost read this short story for nothing. I felt like I walked into happiness when she was found, then pulled into the sinister sea of sadness.
At first I did not understand what you were talking about. The picture was a bit vague. I saw a mixture of different pictures form different movies :Resident Evil pictures and pictures of The Priest. Is this an unfinished work?
This gave me a bad feeling about people looking for that right person, knowing that they will be hurt by the persons they seek. I did not like this poem because it was a bit too ambiguous. However, it is still a good poem because it gives a life lesson to those who go after the opposite sex for the wrong reasons.
Peter reasons through every situation, sentence, and set of words that Humphrey throws at him, or says to himself to maintain his sanity. It reminds me of, well, an exaggerated version of me. LOL, I have to change! I like this work because it shows how a person can you use technology to have fun. It shows how computers can be a nausance. ( I think I spelled that right. If not correct me.)
I presume that Wallace Humphrey was an astronaught,( I think I spelled that right. If not correct me.)
right? ( I think I spelled that right. If not correct me.)
I wonder, does Peter ever come back with a (lol) well planned schedule? Or does he explode?
When you get a chance, can you come and read my poems?
I liked the eighth line the most. Where did you get that large number from in the previous line? Are they atoms? This poems was random but really cool!
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