I like it! Let me just start out by saying great job. It's a very creative idea for a poem and I don't think I've read one like this before, so I love the creativity. One thing I did notice is how you used repeated lines only twice (if that makes sense.) I feel like it would be a lot more impactful if you repeated the two ending lines at the end of each stanza and not just after the second one. Other than that, honestly, I love it! Great job, keep it up.
This is fantastic! The only thing I noticed was the one period at the end. it seems a bit out of place. I don't know much about poetry though. To others, it probably looks fine. Maybe add a few throughout the poem? I also like how it seems Halloween-ish, but it really has a deeper meaning. That's very clever. Overall, you did a great job on this poem! I can't wait to read more from you!
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