Very interesting story line. Easy for casual to advance readers. It captured me form the starting. The flow was good. The dialogues well thought off. The twist in end was surprising as I was thinking that the person inside the car would be the trouble maker instead of the cops. Would like to see how the story progress.
Hello, The story line looks interesting. For a dramatic approach it was wonderful. But the beginning needs to be worked on more as you almost lost me there. For casual readers the starting needs to be simplified to capture their attention. The later half drama then can be made more palatable.
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