Good read! Stumbled a little on the "Please, it hurts too much . . ." line. Wasn't sure at first who was speaking or why they hurt. Maybe flesh it out a little more. Have the doctor speak, maybe. Anyway, love the idea and the well-written lines. Could be a great story starter.
Wow! As a wife, mom and also a "Cleaner Upper Of All Trash Which Is Apparently Invisible To All Other Family Members," I found your content very humorous. In my world, it would have been a dirty sock on the basement steps, beckoning for some overloaded soul to place their foot on it before sending them to their grave. It seemed to be a strange swing from what was "realistic" to the more unrealistic events that followed - although cats and dogs do occasionally die from what they eat (my friend lost her beloved husky from eating their vinyl pool). And rather disconcerting to think one's entire family might all die from an encounter with a candy wrapper. Nonetheless I found the ending great! All the best and I look forward to reading more of your works.
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