I really enjoyed this piece. The flow of it went along with the words and context. I wish a place like this actually did exist. But, maybe the thought/fantasy of it is every better. Thanks for sharing. Hoping to see more work from you in the near future.
wow! This is a work of art, saddening, however is a relief. I am not sure what city was or is known by the "city of lights" though I've heard it before. But, I am from Detroit, Michigan, USA if you happen to know where that is and some history of it. If you do not, my city is extremely similar.
I will never understand how and why money is so important, or thought of as such, to people. Without us money wouldn't mean anything. Also, the world was spinning before money. Therefore, it could go on without as well.
Not conforming to something that you strongly believe in is one of my strong beliefs. I wish people in your city, and mine, and every else in the world would understand these things that we speak of.
Thank you for sharing. I am definitely looking forward to seeing more of your work
Wow! I love this. This is a story and a motivation all in one. For, people put age limits on when they should have a happy relationship, starting a family, beginning life. If they tend to not get what they thought they should have at that exact age, they feel incomplete. Your story says that even if you feel that way, that's not the end; it could still happen for you. Eternal happiness, soul peace and wholeness is what many of us seek of this lifetime. Thanks for sharing. :)
this is great because it is short, simple and deep at the same time. Although I love poems that are thought intriguing and makes you sit and contemplate, I also love works that tend to get straight to the point. I especially love artists who are excellent in doing so, then still makes it suspenseful or amazing to the point that the reader wants to read over and over, taking it all in over and over. Thanks for sharing.
It seems that too many of us know this feeling all too well.
You painted a vivid picture, you know.
I like the way you presented this, the choice of words and the fact that it's short and isn't hard to understand, but still has a lot of emotion pouring from the words here.
Thank you for sharing.
At first, I didn't quite understand what you were implying here and how the bank situation and life on earth was connected. But once I re-read and analyzed over, I got a message from it that I've been thinking in my mind for a while now. There are certain things in life that have rules and a set of instructions, there's a right and a wrong way to do it, or better and worst decisions to make whilst doing these things. Banking, for example, is one of those things. As you said, someone informed and working in banking can tell you the better decisions upon opening bank accounts and other things related. However, life itself has no "how-to" book that comes with every baby born. You really only learn from experiencing things, or trying to make decisions from observing and learning from others experiences. People tend to think that they have life all figured out, and that is a common misconception.
This was a thought provoking piece, for me at least.
Thank you for sharing, looking forward to more of your work.
The euphoric feeling that I only get when I'm crushing on someone. Except, for the love of my life. Been knowing him since sixth grade, I am now a freshman in college, and thinking of him still gives me the feeling.
You describe the feeling of this very well and paint the picture vividly.
I admire the word choice here and the flow of it all, even though it doesn't necessarily rhyme.
Thank you for sharing, looking forward to coming across more of your work.
I enjoyed this piece. We do, as people, seem to pick and choose when we love and don't love something. Perfect example is nature. We scream that it's too hot in the summer, but too cold in the winter, so we miss the winter during summer and vice versa. Love is not something that is only sometimes. You take it all in, embrace it and love it. Thank you for sharing this.
I don't know if it is because I'm a college student, but when you said "it was almost time" I thought about an assignment due online at a specific time. Usually my professors make my assignments due at 11:59 and 8:59 is pretty close to 11:59 when you haven't started the assignment at all. That could be pretty scary. (lol) anyhow, the prompt is very mysterious and suspenseful. I would have liked to see what it was almost time for, but that's the point of suspense and mystery, you always wish there was more.
I enjoy the fact that you put yourself in the life of an orca, stories like that tend to be better sometimes. I also like how you took actual facts about orcas, they don't live long and sometime kill their keepers for lack of proper care, and put it into the story. Stories with truth behind it are always nice. This is a good write, keep up the good work.
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