I enjoyed this poem. I liked that you didn't feel the need to stretch your vocabulary. I thought that the writing was clear and coherent, and that the rhyming didn't feel forced. I don't know how old you are, but you definitely have potential! More potential than me and I'm almost thirty years old!
I could also relate to the poem. This was perfect for my day today. It was terrible and anxiety-provoking, so the mood of the poem translated well for me.
The only issue I saw was a typo/ misused word, which is something we all do. 'Withdrawal' is something a person suffers from when they stop taking certain medications. Some addicts suffer from it when they can't find their drug of choice. I think you meant to write 'withdraw'.
Anyway, good job! Keep writing. You'll only get better:) You're already doing a good job!
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