I enjoyed this poem a lot. I think it flows well and has quite a strong finish, even though it starts off with something almost everyone has seen and done.
I really enjoyed this poem, it flows well between line to line and the short sentences don't feel choppy. The story is clear and inspires a very clear image.
The only thing I would say is I would have liked it if the lines were spaced a little further apart, I think it would be more visually pleasing, but that's just me.
Good job!
-Merle
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