Aww that was lovely. So does he actually stay in that dream or should i say game world forever? Really good story! No errors, no mistakes, and at least i can look at it and think what i can do with my work tp improve! :)
That was a really good story! And a great twist at the end. With stories I can easily picture everything that happens in them, and I can clearly see everything you were talking about!
Nice job!
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