I like this. I have to admit I know nothing of poetry. This is one of the first poems I've read besides passages in books so I don't know if there is a certain way it's supposed to be written. Maybe replace 'touch" with something else, it just doesn't seem to fit right to me, with the two body parts then a sense. Maybe 'soul'.
And it's late so I can't figure out if it would still make sense if you take the "a" out before lethargic rhythm, but I think it would flow better.
I think it would be cool to end it with 'she dances' just like it started.
But I can only watch
She dances
anyway that's my unqualified review lol. Good job though this has made me want to read some more poetry to see whats out there.
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