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Review of My Insanity  
Review by Mike
Rated: ASR | (3.5)
Pretty good work. I see one line that troubles me and that is about asking for help: I asking my family for help before I feeling like drowning. I think this would be a bit better said plainly: I asked my family for help; before,a feeling of drowning. and on the line of stopping running I think perhaps ---says, "It's time too, to stop running--" I get goofed up on the use of To and Too all the time and have to check you may want to as well. Quote marks are ok in poetry too, you know. I use them if I am slamming down a statment.
One more on forgetting---ways; But, forget not the lose of ease the way you have stated that one means you should and have to forget and I know you are saying you can't.
Have a fine day and write on; do it with a smile!
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