Wow, good work on this piece. Its very captivating with an exceptional hook at the beginning. I loved your approach. You are well on your way to finding your voice as an author.
Your characters are well developed and the plot is very interesting.
There a few minor techinical errors that can be fixed in just a couple of read throughs.
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