Well done on writing a poignant poem about such sad subject matter.
I guess you could say this poem was quite literal - little use of flowery 'poem'-like words, more a retelling of what has happened and some of what your friend was going through while he was alive.
In some lines, the rhyming is effective, while in others, it is a little forced, and doesn't flow.
However, it is quite touching, and obviously you reached inside and listened to your feelings when you wrote it. It would have been a great poem to have read at a funeral or other such memorial.
Thank you
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