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Review of The Jester  Open in new Window.
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Rated: E | (5.0)
Hi.

I really like this. You have captured the sinister jester in all of us in this poem.

The first two lines are a great hook, and I like the way that you round the poem off by brining back the image of the bed at the end. The rhyming scheme is nice, even with the dubious rhyming of 'pillow' and 'hollow'. On the whole your words scan comfortably with the exception of 'The entertainer starts slowly dying'. I struggled with this line, especially when read out loud, the word 'is' instead of 'starts' may be easier to read, but that is only my opinion. That said, I do really like your poem.

Well done.

missmonkey
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Review of Stirred Memories  Open in new Window.
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Rated: E | (5.0)
Hi

Works for me! Love it. The first two lines are a really good hook. Your poem's beauty is in its simplicity, I thought it was going to be sad, but I was wrong and I found your words moving.
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