Their is a lot of stuff in this poem. It seems like its many stories broken up all over the places. Maybe you could break it up in to the sections that go together. I feels like it jumps all over the places but I might not be reading it right. I’m a beginning poet, I’m not quiet sure how to read it. Try reading it backwards ... it seemed to make more sense to me reading It backwards. try it = )
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My Addiction
What started as a time waster became a waste of life
i exspected this to be about drug aditttions. i should have realized it was about vampiers because you have 2 other short storys in the same row about vampers. i was exspecting a seris drug story with the titel and about section. ones i started reading, it was a nice unexsepeted, supprics that it was not so heavy. how much muney did u spend at ferst. i like your fun word like ( frolic and potential slacker time) they give a light and playfull feel to the story. i laght when i read u where so exsited to go to work to play video games. lol. (i read and play games at my job to) this is not a real story? because i really sound like this happed to you. You are a great writer. i might read your other stuff. Keep up the Good work.
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