Well! I think this is a really good effort in expressing your feelings for someone very special to you.
I really think that your beginning line was great but after that i think the flow was somewhat quite broken from the 3rd line.Moreover, I think the repeatition of the words made it monotonous, by adding some more variety of words it will grab the readers attention.
Also, I think there are some puncuation errors.
I think if there is a full stop after "You love him" becuse without it the next line line does not makes much sense, because "Love is like a Diamond"is a new sentence.
I also think if you could break it up in stanzas and expand it a little more it would be a great work. You can also, try to add something else after "Love is like a diamond" then it would make better sense.
Overall:- I like the theme and the effort!
Write on!
Good work!
Wow! a short but very well written and expressed poem. I really like the way you have created these beautifull natural images in the mind of the reader.
I like the way you have brought together friendship and nature.
The word usage is good and I really like the expressions in the poem.
My favourite is the second stanza of the poem.
Overall:- I just simply enjoyed reading your work and couldn't find anything missing.
A great work!
Write on!
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After reading your poem Iam also sure to say that you certainly have an amazing way with words.
A well written poem. I really enjoyed and liked the whole concept of sunflower, this way connecting it to nature.
Overall:- A short poem, with a detailed expressions and wonderful imagery.
A great work!
Write on!
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A very well written poem. The feelings and expressions are beautifully.
You have described wonderfully what your dreams really are and where you are content and happy. Your poem gives out a positive beem and a pinch of satisfaction is in there.
I think whatever comes from heart is the best form of poetry!
The flow and word usage is really could!
I really hope your dreams live on forever
I enjoyed reading it!
A great poem!
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A nice wrk of poetry. I really liked the whole concept of getting away from reality each of our part wants to do that sometime or another.
I think the structure of the poem was good but the flow and the usage of word could have been improved on.
Other than that, the expressions and the descriptin is wisely done.
Overall:- A short sweet poetry.
Keep up the great work!
Write on!
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Wow! a long but very well written poem , worth a the long read. Firstly, i really liked the concept and I think due to this kind of topic many of the readers will be able to relate with this poem. The feelings of the Young person who has kept secret from his/her parents are expressed wonderfully. I know how restless one feels when they are keeping a secret.
The flow is goos and it is a good work of free verse poetry. However, i think the structure and the flow could have been better. I think there are a few punctuational errors too.
Overall:- A great work of poetry and i really enjoyed reading it.
A great work!
Write on!
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A very well written and expressed poem. I really enjoyed reading it through out. The usage of words, vocabulary and description is excellent.
The flow of the poem , the rythem is very easy going and smooth, it really rings a bell when i read it aloud. A great poem, a great concept of destiny and doom.
Overall a great poem!
Keep up the great work!
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Momo.
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