MomofTwins's (momoftwins) Reviews

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#3958152

Review of The Last Geisha

Review by MomofTwins

Rated: E

| (4.5)

HI Mrs. Dale,

This was a very good story, with heart felt emotion and rich description. The interwoven history of how she came to be was well done. I did think a new paragraph could have been started at "The sun started to move to its high place......" and again at "She followed the road out of Aiko....." Small things really.
I hope you will post more of this intriguing story.

Thank you

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#3954725

Review of The Art of Disingenuous Apologies

Review by MomofTwins

Rated: 18+

| (5.0)

HI Charlie,

I loved your piece all the way through, I could see your conversation and how this could play out in your mind all day long. I found my self creating others in the same vane as I was reviewing your work. I felt the language style was approiate and the flow prefect. Nicely done.

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#3941150

Review of Another Long Year

Review by MomofTwins

Rated: ASR

| (3.5)

HI Phillip,

I loved this peice, I felt it, lived it and wear it like a sucky blanket ! I did feel that the 3rd paragraph of description could have used a little more substanial plot though and you might want to think of a paragraph of two that can fit between the 3rd and 4th paragraph.

Still loved it though, I think I have had this exact conversation when I was young.

Thanks for the memory!

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#3927909

Review of George's Christmas

Review by MomofTwins

Rated: E

| (4.0)

Hi Krya,

Well done! The rhyme, the prose, the flow were all good. Thank you for sharing.

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#3923244

Review of Love is Only Sometimes a Choice

Review by MomofTwins

Rated: E

| (2.5)

Hi Midnight Skeyes,

This is a good internal monologue, one that I am sure we have all had at one point or another.
It was short and to the point and that is good but when I self talk I find I usually will compare this to that, here to there. This is the only thing I missed in this monologue

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#3922071

Review of i thought

Review by MomofTwins

Rated: E

| (3.5)

HI Irot,

This is a really good poem but I had trouble with the second last line, I when I caught it's meaning then I realized it still read "off" but still a really good poem and I am not a poetry person.

Thanks for sharing.

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#3921911

Review of When I Was Young and Full of Glee

Review by MomofTwins

Rated: E

| (3.5)

Good Morning Ulysses,

I took the time to read you twice to feel your emotions and to feel your storms. I could see that little boy just as easy as seeing my own kids on those nights when the storms are putting on a show. I truly enjoyed this poem. What I really liked was how it has a lyrical ring when reading it. I did have a little trouble with the second last paragraph the line that starts: "If only I was five again with endless continuity I may no longer weep" it took me a minute or two to wrap my mind around this.