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Review of Boys  Open in new Window.
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Rated: E | (3.5)
Looks good!

Suggestion:
Lady rather than Ladie?

Keep writing!
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Rated: E | (4.5)
I like you message.
Your use of repetition really drives home the idea of the relationship. i particularly liked your last change at the end, where your sons become the focus rather than the transition.

Our children grow up all too soon. We need to treasure the moments that come along, when they come along.

Keep writing!

Pat
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