Interesting. :P
I found this to be a nice read, but maybe the atmosphere and situation didn't get quite the suspense that it deserves? You might want to take yourself more time to describe the surroundings and what it resembles and whatnot. Spend maybe just a little more time telling the readers of what they’re to suspect from the situation without actually giving out anything too important to the story. Except from that, it’s was ok. :)
It was a decent read, but parts of it were quite stretched and heavy to complete. Because of this, there were unfortunately parts of the story that became more of a bother then a joy. Try to make sure that what you write is made into smaller portions, it makes for a story that is easier to read and remember.
Though I didn't completely understand the setting and story, this was still very much entertaining to read. You amazingly play around with descriptions and that is the part that captured me. Very nice.
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