I thought your poem was very entertaining. I really enjoyed it. I think your Poem showed great imagination and talent. You should add more to it and maybe contemplate a childs book, it would make a cute one. Keep on writing, I hope to read more.
I like your poem, although, I feel, and mind you this is just my opinion, I would take out some of the "As I lay Dying" there are too many of them. I feel the other verses sort of get lost in them.
Keep writing you are talented.
Yes is sounds like a poem to me. It is very well written and flows nicely. I feel what you feel in your poem, it provokes my own feelings of love, lonliness, etc. I especially like your analogy of a tear being the souls blood. Excellent work.
Never quit writing.
Your story was so INCREDIBLY AWESOME. I loved it. I used to run trot lines with my grandpa when I was young. It really brought back some good memories for me. Your story brought tears to my eyes and touched my heart. Keep on writing, your are great. And by the way it would make an excellent short story in my opinion.
I really like your poem, it is original and clever. You are talented, you write very well. I could see nothing wrong with this poem, although, if this was my work I would drop the word "still" on line 9. In my opinion it stops the flow.
Keep on writing.
I LOVE IT. I LOVE IT. I LOVE IT. This is the one of the funniest pieces I have ever had the pleasure to read. It's original, unique, and clever. How did you come up with the concept? You are exceptional in talent. Keep writing. You need a period at the end of the first line. That is all I could see.
First I want to say I really like the concept, a riddle in a poem, very creative and original. You express yourself very well and I see nothing wrong with your poem except that you need a comma at the end of line 6. Your piece is awesome, keep it up.
Is the answer to the riddle.....A Coral Snake?
Could you please respond back as soon as you can, I am dying to know the answer.
I love your story, how you told it in the first person as if you were mary. You did a great job, and other than a few typos, and spacing the paragraphs I don't see anything wrong. Your story pulled me in, I did'nt want to stop reading it. Keep on writting.
I think your piece is really nice,
even though a hand was sliced.
You express yourself very well,
with these words, it should sell.
I can see nothing wrong,
grammar wise your really strong.
Keep up the work Rhyming Man,
I am now a Great Big Fan.
I like your poem. You say alot in just a few words.
There are times when, "Less is more", is called for, and I feel your poem proves that. Thanks for sharing.
I think you did very well on this piece, and I enjoyed reading it very much. In my opinion, you did a fantastic job. I think I would change other to others on line 18. That is just my opinion, I am new at this as well. Keep up the good work, you should go far.
Moreana W.
I don't think anyone could have said it better. I really enjoyed reading this, and I will be laughing all day. I know several people who take the subject much to seriously, and swear up and down that they never......., which we all know is a bunch of bunk. I can't wait for them to read this.
Thanks
Moreana W.
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