Title: Is it reflective of the theme?
The "Rock" is figurative of an individual who supported the author.
Grammar and Punctuation: Speak for themselves
The author expresses ideas with precise sentences.
Rhythm and flow: How does it read aloud?
No errors here.
Theme: What idea is the author trying to get across?
The author clearly demonstrates deep affection and love for the author's hero.
What I liked/disliked:
My favorite line:
"The reason tomorrow is the color of gold"
Well done!
Title: Is it reflective of the theme?
While the title mimics some of the words on the poem, I feel its misleading to the content and theme.
Grammar and Punctuation: Speak for themselves
Grammar was fitting for the type of poem.
Not too many punctuation errors but some of the lines turned into run on sentences
Rhythm and flow: How does it read aloud?
I would like to see the lines separated more, creating longer stanzas.
I think it would read with more purpose.
Theme: What idea is the author trying to get across?
Sometimes we get stuck and have to rise above the obstacles.
What I liked/disliked:
"Someone so disheartened, becoming bashed and ruined"
Keep writing!
Title: Is it reflective of the theme?
The title is the poem
Grammar and Punctuation: Speak for themselves
I found no errors.
Rhythm and flow: How does it read aloud?
Only a couple of missteps on the rhythm in this piece.
Theme: What idea is the author trying to get across?
Religious take on the Apocalypse.
What I liked/disliked:
This poem relays a very serious and profound subject in a sing -songy way which I found disturbing.
I think it would be better served to remove the rhyming words due to the darkness of the subject matter.
It is a contradiction to the intense feelings that accompany this piece.
A few of the lines have too many syllables, however, it seems to work in this piece.
Theme: What idea is the author trying to get across?
The title speaks for the theme.
What I liked/disliked:
I loved this stanza:
"I speak of the mothers and fathers whose child has laid down their life
I speak of the lonely spouses who have lost their husband or wife
I speak of brothers and sisters whose sibling can't be home where they belong
I speak of the many children left with only memories of a parent now gone'
The title to this piece fits nicely with its content.
Grammar and Punctuation: Speak for themselves
I found no misspellings or obvious grammatical errors. I would like to see some commas added.
Rhythm and flow: How does it read aloud?
The rhythm is slightly off in this but I can get past it because I can almost hear a melody longing for some soulful guitar to accompany it. Perhaps a syllable count would be helpful.
Theme: What idea is the author trying to get across?
The author's love of music is obvious and brings the reader to a lonesome day at at the beach.
What I liked/disliked:
I love this stanza......
"Then the ancient mountain souls
come forth from their dark holes
rumble deep and mighty groans
singing bass to my sweet tones"
I read this piece over and over. There is something haunting about the picture that you paint. The simile of the girl retching up her coffee in order to free herself from the pain of a bad relationship is vivid, yet it holds some hidden depths. I loved this. Thank you for sharing it.
I found this to be very insightful. "He realises that he has been put down by some unknown force and thus to balance this he pens down his emotions and creates his own characters who perform as he wants them to. " "Realizes" is spelled incorrectly, however, I like the concept of this thought. Well done!
Just loved this. I can feel the relief the author feels as he escapes from the office and dreams about his childhood. I noticed the use of the words "meaningless" and "endless" twice in the piece and wondered if this had been intentional to stress those concepts, or if it was simply an accident. Thanks for sharing.
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