First of all: Wow.
You really get your point across, in such a way you can't not rejoin the readers mind. You can't leave him without reflecting. Your poem is absolutely true, showing a false belief of superiority that sadly, mos tof us hold.
As for the structure, it is my opinion that it perfectly fitted the message
Bravo
First of all, I love how the text was written. The dialogue was very charming, mostly because of the child's innocence of the outside world.
Second,I love how you represent the situation, when the mother remember her wings being clipped, that she was once the 99/100
In my opinion, this is a great text with a great theme and a great narration mode
Ok. First of all, I adore the concept, which is very comedic. and clearly shows your point, that we can't live without pets onces we are accustomed to them. Overhall, I think it's a great poem through it's comedic side. You should try to make more of that kind
The poem was well written and well separated, and was easy to read as a flow. To me, it expressed from childhood to adulthood.
I'd also add it is odd that the parts are becoming shorter as you advance, but you know what you are doing
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