first off, congratulations for having a partner. I hope you spend many more days happy with one another.
Secondly, I think it is kind hearted of you and sweet to write a poem about your loved one. I know I would do the same, and many more people would too.
I hope you have a successful career in whatever you do
Mr. Mans
I am still a new author, so please do not expect a fancy review.
I found this from the read and review area.
First off, It runs at a steady pace, and it ends with a cliffhanger that makes you want more. The setting and theme is well, though if you described more of the setting and created a way for a mental image of the things around them more, I feel it would be better.
Over all, I really like the story and hope that you read more.
On top, please take this tip that I learned from a fellow writing.com user:
Using size 4 with verdana font can both look better and help you read it, keeping attention.
I am still a new author, so please do not expect a review of extraordinary detail
I found this from the read and review section.
I have to say, the first few lines succeeded in grabbing my attention. I like the use of rhyme at times, and it certainly helps keep the readers attention.
The use of the color green helps catch the readers eyes, instead of the standard black of normal text.
Over all, your writing is amazing and I can not wait for you to write more.
May your creativity shine.
I am still a new author, so expect my writing to be not so over the top.
I found this through read and review.
I like the use of metaphors and similes (Or at least, I think those are what you used, It's hard for me to remember most of the writing lingo and what it means, I just use it and it looks good LOL.)
On top of this, it tells a story, in the most vivid ways possible. I really like this and hope you write more.
On top of this, there is something I learned that is really useful for easy reading and catching attention, from a fellow writing.com user.
If you set it to size 4 and font verdana, with double spacing from the advanced menu, it tends to look good and is easy to read.
I am still a new writer myself, so please do not expect anything over the top.
I found this through the read and review page.
I quite like this poem.
It re-uses lines, to bring importance or to symbolize the mountain more, I'm not sure.
This poem made me question a lot, and I would like to see more like this.
Also, a tip I got from a fellow writer is to set the size to 4 and the font to verdana, as well as double spacing in the advanced tab.
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