there is so much hurt in your poem...
it makes me also sad knowing that you were able to create this poem because of pain from a broken friendship...
but you're coping, it's good to know that you're using poetry to move on and serve as an outlet of your emotions...
i believe it's better to transform these negative feelings into beautiful works of art...
wow..i totally dig your poetry...i honestly thought at first that it would yield to me happy thoughts, but instead i felt the pain of the persona in the poem...so sad.
i just noticed this line:
"it's tight little knots are nothing to my power"-- i think it should be its without the apostrophe
and also the line "the net that seemed so mighty AS first" i think that ought to be at...
but other than that..i sooooo dig your poetry. honest and simple.
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