I like this! It is a lot of fun to read, and I'm sure it would be a riot to act out! What I love the most about this is that instead of sticking with what the Bible says, you use items like a candy bar and a trophy to really reach out to the children. Keep up the good work!
I love to turn Bible Stories into scripts, and I do it quite frequently for my church. You do a good job of turning the dialect into a scene, and the detailed movement of the actors is very nice. However, I'd like to challenge you to move beyond the actual text. Instead of having Jesus say "This will bring glory to God. We’ll wait here a few days, then go see Lazarus." He could say something like "This is a great chance for Me to honour My Father. Let's stay here for a few days, and then we'll go see Lazarus". This makes the script more interesting, and allows you to avoid parts when there are unanswered statements. (eg Disciples: But they tried to kill you in that town!
Jesus: Lazarus is sleeping. I need to go wake him up is an unanswered statement)
This is what I have done for my scripts, and I tend to include humour, as it livens up the skit. But don't be discouraged. I like this. Let me know if you have any other ideas.
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