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Encouraging but helpful. Most of the review will be about how good/what i liked about your writing, but i will point out flaws if i see any! :)
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Short Stories
Favorite Genres
Mystery, Sports, Romance
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Murder Mysteries
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I will review pretty much anything
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Review of Not Even a Mouse  Open in new Window.
Review by Izzy's Writing Author IconMail Icon
Rated: E | (5.0)
This is such a kid thing! Only they could imagine being the mouse and climbing a tree! I loved the details you put in there and how you put the thoughts. That was a great touch. And of course she goes to bed when Santa is about to come, LOL!!!! "
Molly’s father picked up the sleeping girl. She smiled in her grogginess, with candy cane still smeared upon her lips." That last line was great! Cheers!!!!
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Review by Izzy's Writing Author IconMail Icon
Rated: E | (5.0)
this was such an AMAZING story!!! so much detail and emotion and... ok, I'm just going to slow down a little bit. The beginning was great! You gave us the character and set up the setting. Drawing someone in with the first line or two is always a good start for a writer. The title made me want to find out more about this character. Was he poor? What was he doing in the subway? As I read it, it was clear that he was playing just to make people happy. That's one of the best things we can do: make people happy. Great Work!!!
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Review by Izzy's Writing Author IconMail Icon
Rated: E | (5.0)
a song/poem for the birthday of a website? That's very creative! I've never thought about doing that before! Creavtity, detail, and emotion are all a big part of writing and you should all three of those thing perfectly in your poem! "
The online writing community
A place to be creative and play!
Creating this sense of unity -
Let's all celebrate - today's the day!" I'm not sure why, but this is my favorite line. CHEERS!!!!
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Review by Izzy's Writing Author IconMail Icon
Rated: E | (5.0)
i found this poem funny yet really awesome at the same time. I'm a Catholic so I kindof get where this is going. I loved how you put all the quotes in the middle and the rest of the story to the left. That's really nice formating work! Great job!!!
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Review of My Secret Name  Open in new Window.
Review by Izzy's Writing Author IconMail Icon
Rated: E | (5.0)
short and sweet! that's the way poems should be! I *Heart* it!
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Review of Fountain of Youth  Open in new Window.
Review by Izzy's Writing Author IconMail Icon
Rated: 18+ | (5.0)
i love this! I'm eighteen years old so this applies to me! ;) You used lots of emotion in this poem and emotion is something a good writer needs in any story. "A woman of eighteen,
I stand before the fountain weeping,
I have gained eternal youth and life,
but I must relearn eighty years of wisdom." i just *Heart* these lines!
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Review of The Dream  Open in new Window.
Review by Izzy's Writing Author IconMail Icon
Rated: E | (5.0)
this was a great tribute to a great leader! I love it when i see leaders get tributes-it makes them even more special. "The dreams
that birthed a land
echoes within each soul,
their light shining like a beacon
for all." this was one of my favorite lines in the poem, probably because it's true! Great Job!!!
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Review by Izzy's Writing Author IconMail Icon
Rated: 13+ | (5.0)
LOL!!! this is how boys and girls who are at bars act!!! this was a great poem and i hope you keep writing! Great Job!!! :)
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Review of Apologies  Open in new Window.
Review by Izzy's Writing Author IconMail Icon
Rated: E | (5.0)
awww! This was a really cute apology! When people's feelings get hurt, it's better to give them some time to cool off rather than say sorry right away-although sometimes that's works too! :)
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Review of One Mistake  Open in new Window.
Review by Izzy's Writing Author IconMail Icon
Rated: E | (5.0)
this was a very good poem! I like how you made the reader feel guilty along with the character-that's the sign of a good writer. Writers should make their readers feel the same way the character is feeling, and then some. "Though she looked at me twice, I turned my face over the side

Now that minute tears my heart with the regret not to look back" that's gonna turn against him real quick, LOL!!!!
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Review by Izzy's Writing Author IconMail Icon
Rated: ASR | (5.0)
this was a really cute little story. Memories of our childhood or with our kids/grandkids are always special. you can never get them back so hold on too them. "Suddenly tears flooded Linda’s eyes. Why’d she start to cry?
Approaching was Jason…carrying that toad-stool topiary he had
bought for his mother. And it was the only thing that he did buy…" the ending was great!
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Review of Dreams  Open in new Window.
Review by Izzy's Writing Author IconMail Icon
Rated: E | (5.0)
AWWW!!! this was a really cute poem. It invokes a feeling of love, peace and friendship. "The world has a color I've never known
For the first time my eyes are open
I dream while I'm awake because you've shown
What no dream could ever improve again" these were my favorite lines in the poem. Great Work!!!!!
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Review of "It"  Open in new Window.
Review by Izzy's Writing Author IconMail Icon
Rated: E | (5.0)
this was an interesting poem. it is very thought-provoking. It was short, but right to the point. "Its effect in Man produces many a sad tale,
for it can turn a reasonable man into a brute." this is my favorite line in the poem: partly because it's true. Great work!!!!
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Review by Izzy's Writing Author IconMail Icon
Rated: 13+ | (5.0)
this was really good! don't know if this is autobiographical, but this had lots of emotion/feelings in it! if it is about you, i liked how you made the reader feel as you felt: sad, depressed, angry. All good stories-all good writings, i should say, should make the reader feel the emotion of the characters or the author. Great work!!
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Review of A feeling inside  Open in new Window.
Review by Izzy's Writing Author IconMail Icon
Rated: E | (4.5)
this was cute! I loved it a lot!!!! the words seemed to come from your soul, which is a very good place to start! "O father hold my right hand, for I'm just a shell with thoughts.

But with you I can touch my soul, finally I can see.

Forever I speak hiding my left hand" these were my favorite lines in the poem!
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Review by Izzy's Writing Author IconMail Icon
Rated: 13+ | (5.0)
this is a super good story! so far, I've been loving it! I like the way you descirbed G as been all flustered around this girl. Hmmm, is it love? I hope it's love, they would be very good together! but the blue jeans and the white tshirt suprised me-I had always though that G was wearing a suit! oh, well. :)
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Review of To Dear Friends  Open in new Window.
Review by Izzy's Writing Author IconMail Icon
Rated: E | (5.0)
this was a good poem. I liked the fact that there was rhyming in there. Rhyming for a poem is very important! My favorite part of the poem? The women in this pub are so cute and attractive -
The night is still young, and the men are all active.
The ladies keep drinking, as the men spend the dollars;
Doesn't matter to them if they're white or blue collars.
Not a worry, tonight, as the pickings are prime!
Good fishing, my friends, it's all on your dime. that's what ppl do on a Saturday night!
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Review by Izzy's Writing Author IconMail Icon
Rated: E | (5.0)
nice to meet you, shaun! how old are you?! The website is a great place to get started on your writing. people here give REALLY good reviews: i've gotten quite a few of them. don't be scared to talk to me or ask me for a review: i'll do it for sure! :)
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Review of Gift for Natalie  Open in new Window.
Review by Izzy's Writing Author IconMail Icon
Rated: 13+ | (5.0)
W-O-W! That is insaying!!!! Poor Paul, Natale doesn't recognize him! :/ Great writing, it was very dramatic. The beginning scene was funny: "
“Well, aren’t these beautiful?” Shelly, my coworker said, moving the smooth petals between her fingers. “Someone’s lucky!”

“You mean someone’s getting lucky,” Tyler teased, reaching over her for the box of donuts." LOL!!! Leave her alone, Tyler! :)
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Review of Torment  Open in new Window.
Review by Izzy's Writing Author IconMail Icon
Rated: 13+ | (5.0)
WWOOOWWW!!! that was intense!!!!! this is kind of how i felt at school: trapped with no where else to go! thanx for recommending this! i liked it!!!!! :)
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Review by Izzy's Writing Author IconMail Icon
Rated: 18+ | (5.0)
this part was funny! Poor G was so flustered! LOL!!!! i loved the detail you used to describe her: i could picture her in my minds eye. Great Job!!!! :)
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Review by Izzy's Writing Author IconMail Icon
Rated: 13+ | (5.0)
i like it so far! just curious, were you a math teacher at one part? Because you have a lot of numbers in your story! i will definatly read more! you used a lot of detail and, as a fellow writer (even though i'm so much younger than you) detail is very important in the story! i like how you went into great detail about where he was-that's a great start!!!
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Review of GHOSTS  Open in new Window.
Review by Izzy's Writing Author IconMail Icon
Rated: E | (5.0)
Wow! I was getting shivers up my spine reading this!! I know it's a poem, not a story, but still... you're a good writer! I can assume you've been writing for a while because your writing is good! I loved the emotion in this poem-it seemed intense and creepy! Great Job on this!!! :)
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Review by Izzy's Writing Author IconMail Icon
Rated: E | (5.0)
Wow! this was a long poem but soooooooooooo deep! i really liked all the detail you used in there! For any type of writing, detail is always very important! that was what my writing teacher used to tell me! "You have to use more detail. We can't get into your character's head!" Keep on writing, this was great!!!! :)
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Review of G. H. DAY  Open in new Window.
Review by Izzy's Writing Author IconMail Icon
Rated: E | (4.5)
this was funny! Great Job!!!! :)
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