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Review by Nathan Thomas Author IconMail Icon
Rated: E | (4.0)
Ann,
I really liked this one, and once again truly relate to what you are saying and your desire to convey that belief to your friends.
I gave this a four, I don't know why I held back and didn't give it a 4.5 or 5.0.
I don't know why, it seems as though it didn't get fully resolved in each stanza, like the last line just seemed to cut across what was going on. I really believe you were getting somewhere in your ideas, and pushing across your sentiment. Maybe you could have coloured and weaved the poem a bit further IN THE BODY, and just used that line at the end?
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Review by Nathan Thomas Author IconMail Icon
Rated: E | (5.0)
Fantastic! I really liked this. Good use of words and rhyme (not the cliche rhyming patterns). Some really nice imagery here which made me conjure up what you were seeing. The anticipation and delight of lovers really came through. Nice turn at the end!
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