My word Brae, iF I could say my words in my language and have you understand them, I most certainly would right now.
At first, I read because the words had caught my attention, but I continued on reading because the content and emotion I felt when reading had caught my interest.
I felt it when you said, "His love for me was in English."
When I read that last part, I eagerly looked down hoping to find a continuation of the story, but knowing even then, that no more words were needed.
I don't know what it was you were projecting, but I feel you. There is not much said here, but I have heard enough, I think.
It's comfortable isn't it, this life you lead? It's unfortunately also lonely. I feel you, Sean.
Keep writing, let your words tumble out, don't hold them back. Live through them until you learn to live in the outside world. Everyone can take a pen and paper and start writing; open up a blank page and start typing. It is the emotion behind your words that kept me reading.
Quite enganging. Got me curious when someone had to die. I'm wondering though, why does the charecter have no gender ? If the charecter is telling the story , does that mean they didn't die ? Is he (May make him male?) now a ghost, telling others how he died? hahahhah! That would be awesome!
I love your wrting style . I felt a bit of what he must've felt. The terror of being forever traped in a grave until he dies . Awareof his situation. I can't think of a worse torture .
What if , it was what the government wanted all along though? It's the government , they've done worse! LOL Okay, so you've left me with a lot of theories now , thank you , that ought to keep my brain busy. I'm honestly not sure how I feel about how this left me hanging. But that shows you're good, if you can get your reader's emotions involved like that.
carefl though , not everyone wants to read a story with an uncertain ending . Most read because they'd like to know the ending because they are uncertain about their own . So they go and read about someone else's
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