The poem, "The Winter King" written by HuntersMoon, your writing shows a very nice complex vocabulary. Your writing has a great rhyming scheme, a great storyline. Your writing has an old English vibe which is great and interesting. The last lines of every paragraph have a very strong impact on the readers and acts as a specialty to your writing.
A very simple but thought provoking poem. I think it could be a little more elaborate and the the stories of both individuals can be explored further. The purpose of asking "who was the better man?" is not really made explicit but the in the end, the idea of asking this question to the audience is a good idea, keeping them involved and interested and asking the audience about their opinion makes them feel important.
A brief and powerful poem, I like how you've used the light and dark as well as the temperature to evokes the reader's feelings and emotions. The last line is empowering, as it again brings readers engagement. The poem does motivate the readers to push ourselves the next day and to keep doing so in order to make the world grow strong.
I think the use of punctuation can help with the emphasis of the words in the poem, and maybe bringing an idea of how long we need to endure this could be beneficial, like using the idea of being able to push through struggles could help.
Overall, a great poem.
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