I really enjoyed reading this story. It was interesting and incredibly well written. It was cryptic, which I liked. The ending seemed kind of rushed and gave a ton of information that I think was not necessary. That was the only downside for me though. If it only had stayed within those cryptic boundaries towards the end, it would've been perfect. It is your story though, so that is just my opinion, do with it what you will.
Also, I liked the suspense with Gina and the arrival of the greys masked by a thunderstorm. The dialogue between the police officers kind of interrupted that "fifth sense" feeling, know what I mean?
All in all, a great read and I hope this turns out into a larger more complex storyline in the future. Keep writing! I simply love scifi like this.
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