Hi tom, Its really a nice horror story, The Illustration is wonderful, the chilling scenes you created in readers mind will gave a strong Impact. I am quite sure that the reader who read this story will also go in there past where they have too done the similar things. the storyline is perfect. though it has a sad ending and it need to be little bit of suspense till the end of story and you did that. till the last word I was thinking that baccy and Jony will return. good horror story.
its really a nice story with a good mystery plot., the way it starts was too good in a normal mood, to come to a scary one. the writer creates and continues the mystery till the end., the way he create a chilling sense in a reader's body was nice, I always thinking of various end the story meets , but it goes on another way always. Goo Job pal.
its a great story, Good story with Quite happy ending, I am quite happy to read it again and again. its really a happy go story with a bit of excitement.
Hi Mark,
its a great story, I am feeling attached with this character, the feelings of pastor you explained are amazing and true to nature, a lonely man thinks the same way.
next is the factor of excitement is their always from first line to last line .
Hi Elemenopy,
The End was superb, during the whole story reading I never thought that the mira can be another thief. Great work,. I really enjoyed from start to end though somtime in the middle of story, I found you the story teller, which breaks concentration ( I think - may not be true for others). Intro of Kale can be made more suspicious.
I really admit that i enjoyed every bit and pieces of story. Keep writing!!!!!!!
Hi Tom,
With this story I am a good fan of yours especially your style to bring something out from nothing ( the sound). We all encountered these type of sounds every day, but nobody bothers about that . You really gave a pictorial effect for you story. It keep me engaged and curious to know what exactly the sound is for ( I have gone with story flow). Only at the last I found that it is only a sound nothing else
In Last I personally feel that it should be more blasting at the end, but any way it is a good writing.
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