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Review of Paperclip Army  Open in new Window.
Rated: E | (5.0)
Allons-y, Joto-Kai Author Icon Wow! I have never found a poem life this before, who new you could turn a simple thing like paperclips into an awesome poem! Keep up the great work!

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Review of Life Is An Ocean  Open in new Window.
Rated: E | (4.0)
Allons-y, SnehalG Author Icon! I really enjoyed reading this, its quiet beautiful! Though on line 8 I think you should have "Though we are late;" not "{Though we are late;".

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Review of Broken  Open in new Window.
Rated: 13+ | (5.0)
Allons-y, Meshellmybell Author Icon! I loves this poem! It portrays a certain emotion so well! There's a certain light to it but also a shade of darkness, i really like the 4th stanza.


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Rated: 13+ | (5.0)
*Gears*Hi, there Joto-Kai Author Icon I really liked this piece.It sounds good, and has a certain 'zaz' to it. I especially like the fifth stanza.






*Gears*Grammar Errors: I see none.
Rating: I will give this a five!
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Review of Dreamer  Open in new Window.
Rated: E | (5.0)
Wow... This is a very moving poem. It so vivid and beautiful. I like how the blue color adds to the piece, I especially like the last stanza. I don't see any grammar errors. I will give this a five!


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In affiliation with Let's help each other grow...  Open in new Window.
Rated: ASR | (5.0)
*Pirateflag*Wow! I read this poem in amazement, it shows the true beauty of nature, I especially like the first stanza!




*Pirateflag*Grammar Errors: I see none.
Rating: I will give this a five!
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Rated: 13+ | (5.0)
A great activity all around! Everything seems to be easy to find.


Grammar Errors: I see none.
Rating: This deserves a five!
This has been Angel signing off!
Happy New Year!


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Rated: 13+ | (5.0)
*Candycaner*Hello, BIG BAD WOLF Feeling Thankful Author IconWow ! I was not sure what to think when I saw the name, but now I'm glad I looked! As a fan of the Redwall series, I find this poem extemelly good! Well written in telling the tale of the warriors of Redwall! Keep up the good work!



*Candycaner* Rating: This deserves a five.
*Candycaner* Grammar Errors: I see none.
*Candycaner*This has been Angel signing off!
*Candycaner*Happy Holidays!


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Rated: E | (4.5)
*Candycaner*Hello, Owen Forrest Author Icon Beautifully written, and easy to read!*Candycaner* Had great rhyme!*Candycaner* I especially like line 3!


*Candycaner*Grammar Errors: I see none.
*Candycaner*Rating: This deserves a 4.5.
*Candycaner*Keep writing and keep posting!
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Review of Idyllic Drift  Open in new Window.
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Rated: E | (5.0)
*Candycaner*A great piece to read!*Candycaner* Vivid words allow the reader to see the poem come to life.*Candycaner* I especially like paragraph 2!


*Candycaner* Grammar Errors: I see none.
*Candycaner*Rating: This deserves a five!
*Candycaner*Keep writing and keep reviewing!
*Candycaner*This has been Angel signing off.
*Candycaner*Happy Holidays!


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Review of Silence  Open in new Window.
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Rated: E | (5.0)
Hello! astrid-gwyneed *Jackolantern*A very nice piece! You words vividly describe just how amazing silence can really be.*Jackolantern* I quiet enjoyed reading this poem.





Grammar Errors: I see none.
Rating: This deserves a five!
*Jackolantern*Keep writing and keep posting!
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Rated: 13+ | (5.0)

*Books1*A very good piece! *Books1*I quiet enjoyed reading this piece! *Books1*You have a lot of originality here, and it has a good rhythm to it. *Books1*I especially like the lines, ‘The preacher slithers to the pulpit like a snake.
The gospel he preaches is nothing but a fake.’
And ‘Welcome, to the Circus Church from Hell!’ something about that just sends chills down my spine.



Grammar Errors: I don’t see any.
Rating: This deserves a five.
*Books1*Keep writing and keep posting!
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Rated: E | (4.0)
This piece has good words and a nice base for a exquisite poem! However there are some corrections that need to be made. 1) In lines 1 and 2 'hopein' should be 'hoping'. 2) On line 1 ' there' should be there 'they're'. 3) On line 2 I think instead of 'weather' you mean to say 'Whether'. 4) On line 3 'somethin' should be 'something'. 5) On line 4 'They' should be 'They're', 'lookin' should be 'looking' and 'anyones' should be 'any one'. 6) On line 5 'can't' should be 'can't'. And the poem might look better is it was centered. Something like this.


Everyone lives there life always hoping for something better.
Whether they believe it will come true they're still hoping, hoping, and hoping.
They search for something new or even just something to help fix things.
They're looking for something, in any ones case. That something is what people long for.
Something you know you can't have or wish you could change.


Rating: I think this deserves a four.
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Review of Promise  Open in new Window.
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Rated: E | (4.5)
*Bell*Hello! strlcuckoo Author Icon*Bell*


Very good! You have the start of a impressive poem, you might want to think about making it a little longer! The words to this piece speak to me in a way that I can't explain, I especially like lines 2 & 3! You might want to change the way the poem looks though, maybe something like this...

"One night while asleep, a dream awoke me.
A kiss so deep, my senses told me.
A promise to keep to my love by me."



Rating: I will give this a 4.5!
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Review of A SOMALIAN CHILD  Open in new Window.
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Rated: E | (4.5)
Very impressive! The images this poem paints are beautiful in some ways and haunting in others! I especially like the second stanza, the words are just breathtaking! Though on the first line of the last stanza you might want to change this 'Two immobile figures of dead parents laid on dusty ground' to this 'Two immobile figures of dead parents laid to rest on the dusty ground'.



Rating: This deserves a 4.5!
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Rated: E | (5.0)
Very impressive! This is the kind of poetry that remains for centuries and is always a delight to read. You weave an epic tale about a warrior who can face nay battle or trail and overcome it!



Grammar Errors: I see none.
Rating: I give this a five!
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Review of Snow Dance  Open in new Window.
Rated: 13+ | (5.0)
Hello! Simply beautiful! The name of this piece caught my eye and I was not disappointed! You paint a beautiful picture of nature. I especially liked the first stanza!


Grammar Errors: I see none.
Rating: I will give this a five!
Keep writing and keep posting.
Happy WDC Anniversary!
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Rated: E | (4.0)
Hello! This is a very powerful poem, and you send a great message with this piece. You clearly paint a picture of how the world and people change. I see no grammar errors though you might want to take out the double spacing and center it, you need to correct some punctuation to. Something like this.


Chaos's drums and Strife marches in to the fields of battle,
Suffering fires it's cannon from the seas of the damned.
Darkness's soldiers land on the sands to defeat hope.
So how do you cope with the world coming to it's end?
The news we see on CNN,
Or children being raped by there kin.
Lend hope reinforcements with soldiers of holy armor,
Swords of redemption caressed in light.
Beholding the sight of change as they clashed,
In the end the battlefield was torn on both sides.
Black clouds disperse and brought light to the land,
Warming mother gaia and silent rings of peace comes forth.
Free of morphed expressions and no personal selection,
So among the tainted earth a flower spring forth and sound the call for change.


Rating: I will give this a four.
Keep writing and keep posting.
Happy WDC Anniversary!
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Review of The ocean  Open in new Window.
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Rated: E | (4.5)
When I read this poem, I could just imagine pristine white beaches, soft sand, and when the sun goes down, thousands of glittering stars. However here is a few things you could do to make it better. 1) Instead of 'The Ocean, The silvery blue waves crash on the white sandy beaches' put' The Ocean, the silvery blue waves crash upon the white sandy beaches' 2) On line three it should be with instead of ith. 3) Put a spaces in between the end of each sentence and the start of the next one. 4) Instead of 'Families pack up, And the disapears behinde the clouds awaiting another day' it should be 'Families pack up, and the sun disappears behind the clouds awaiting another day. 5) You could replace some of the periods with commas. 6) You could make the form a little different, something like this.




'The ocean, the silvery blue waves crash upon the white sandy beaches.
The black rocks on the side shine in the sunlight like shimmering bits of glass.
The sound of children laughing fill the air along with the sweet smell of zesty ribs.
As the sun clears so does the beaches.
Families pack up, and the sun disappears behind the clouds awaiting another day.
Then the moon arises, millions of stars fall into focuse.
The great end to a perfect day




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Review of Winter Snow  Open in new Window.
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Rated: E | (5.0)
A very lovely poem. You paint a clear picture, of a time of peace and I can clearly see the whole world covered in white with the sun shining brightly in the sky. The only thing is that you might want to go back and put some punctuation.


Rating: I will give this a five!
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Review of inside  Open in new Window.
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Rated: 13+ | (4.0)
Very good! This describes how feelings can bubble up inside of you, and if you keep ignoring them, they'll just get stronger and stronger. And sometimes you just want to let them all out. You might want to add some periods and commas to this piece.




Rating: I'll give this a four.
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Rated: E | (5.0)
Very good! I like how this poem is represented. In flows smoothly and sounds good to the ear. I especially like the part 'A passage has cleared, for serenity through Hell'




Grammer Errors: I see none.
Rating: This deserves a five!
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Review of Does Life Matter?  Open in new Window.
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Rated: E | (4.5)
Very good! I like the scene that I see when I read this poem. It is full of vivid images and great imaginary. Though, you should replace the & with and. I especially like the line 'To live a life through which happiness if rife.'




Rating: Fix these mistakes and it could be a five!
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Review of I Am  Open in new Window.
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Rated: E | (5.0)
This is beautiful! It shows that dying isn't sad but it can be happy because the person is in a better place. It's all about finding the little things in life that remind you of that person.




Grammer Errors: I see none.
Rating: This deserves a five!
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Review of Dear 2011  Open in new Window.
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Rated: E | (5.0)
Very good! With your words you make me think that no matter what we have faced in the past year we have to keep our heads up and keep going. This poem is encouraging in some ways to. I especially like the lines 'you can tell this next year to bring its moon shoes 'cause we're raising the bar in 2012'




Grammer Errors: I see none.
Rating: This deserves a five!
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