Wow! This glimpse into your mind is so fascinating. You combined these words to eloquently represent your experiences, even just the small glimpse. This is why I was hoping you would start writing. Cathartic. I even clenched my stomach, like I had been punched.
There were some grammatical errors mainly at the very beginning of the story, but there weren't that many. I like this story because of the detail. There was a lot of detail. The inner workings of the main character was great. The conversations between the characters were awesome. I really liked the in-depth detail to this. Very good! This is my first 5 rating. Good luck!
Even though this story is short, flash-fiction, I really like it. The glimpse into this world, the possibilities of where the story could actually lead seem fascinating. I would love to read more, especially since the mere thought of how different our world could be without the simple gesture of a handshake are so intriguing. The conversations are well written and the glimpse into the world very cool. Good luck!
There are some grammatical errors, but I'm following along with the story well. I really like it. The imaginings of the robots, their weapons, the people's descriptions are very unique. I like the seemingly natural flow of the story. I also like the battle scenes. Very good. Good luck.
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