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Review of Draw  Open in new Window.
Review by chardan Author IconMail Icon
Rated: E | (5.0)

Aye, that's grand in its own way but this bold approach... it would hardly work out so man-rewarding in
real life? Well. not fer me anyway. Howmsoever. more grist to your 'type' and do not we need to escape
to an ideal world for a moment or two anyway?
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Review of Notions  Open in new Window.
Review by chardan Author IconMail Icon
Rated: E | (5.0)



It definitely agrees with me. .. however a wee bit of 'grit' with 'beauty will record'. Maybe you are
light years ahead of me, but I would want something like.. 'that heart will hold and treasure'.
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Review of The Perfect Car  Open in new Window.
Review by chardan Author IconMail Icon
Rated: E | (5.0)

Did I spot a missing letter 's' ?

Liked this well!
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Review by chardan Author IconMail Icon
Rated: E | (5.0)


Welll Niofnas says: You ARE what eats you! . Try to discredit this if you will.
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Review of May You Forget Me  Open in new Window.
Review by chardan Author IconMail Icon
Rated: E | (5.0)
sounds sincere enough to me. Reminds me a bit of the soung Plasir d'Amour. A hopeless
case of not being able or wanting to be able to LET GO! That is unfortunately so often the
human condition.. I think you should reflect now and then on the possibility that supposing
you had been successful and won your love's hand that the 'marriage' would have been
'made in heaven' calibre. I think your poem is successful since it seems to come from the
heart....

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Review of Untitled  Open in new Window.
Review by chardan Author IconMail Icon
Rated: E | (5.0)


Like branches we sway
On tomorrow's drunken breath

I just just tried this out...
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Review of My Fears  Open in new Window.
Review by chardan Author IconMail Icon
Rated: E | (4.5)

I am new here so bear with me while I adjust my wings... Awsome to me is this world of reviewing. For now, I will pick on one alone line and ask if it might be better this way

Hearts can, with pen, be won- or undone!














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Review of Anabel's Baloon  Open in new Window.
Review by chardan Author IconMail Icon
Rated: E | (4.5)
How can you be one hundred per cent positive that that was truly your original blue. I certainly
never could unless I had awarded it a very distictive string. But perhaps I may have missed something
as I often do! In any case I did find your piece enjoyable to read. Particularly so since you did not set
out to spoil the little boys pleasure with his serendipitous find. niofnas
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