Nixie🦊's (nixie9) Reviews

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Review Style

Template most of the time, covering setting/plot/characters/conflict/resolution if applicable. For shorter works, I concentrate more on feelings evoked.

I'm good at...

Short story, chapter reviews and in-depth reviews.

Favorite Genres

Sci-fi, Romance, mystery, children's

Least Favorite Genres

Historical

Favorite Item Types

Short stories, novel chapters

Least Favorite Item Types

essay, editorial, non-fiction, somebody's homework assignment

I will not review...

XGC, poems, prose. I am an animal activist and vegan, so cruelty or violent, unnecessary, death due to negligence is overwhelming. I am unable to review any pieces involving abuse of any kind to anyone. I like to keep my corner or the world happy, because I grew beyond my "challenges" of childhood and don't want to look back.

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#4786605

Review of A Big Surprise

Review by Nixie🦊

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Rated: E

| (4.5)

Hi Detective. Congratulations on your 11 years of membership. I've returned for a second anniversary review.

The Choice
The title didn't grab my attention, but the brief description sure did! I was in a state of anticipation, wondering what the mission could be.

The comments
The unusual theme intrigued me.

How true is the opening paragraph. Look as if you fit in and you will. The plot unraveled evenly, with only a few hitches. The reader has enough salient details to fill in any gaps. Mentioning that corporate espionage was common alleviated a sense of wrongness. This guy wanted work from wherever it could be found.

The third paragraph expanded on the idea of fitting in, and the repetition of (just enough) was clever.

Suggestions
First paragraph/sentence three is a bit awkward
He trusted that his tailored suit, purposeful stride and confident demeanor to allow him to pass unnoticed by anyone who might interfere with the completion of his job.

Oops
A contract could last anywhere from a few weeks toa few months,(/c}
to a

Once uploaded, the virus programs contained on the flash drive would set InterGen Consolidated back weeks, even months.
Since the previous sentence already stated what was on the drive, there's no need to repeat it.

He would be done and gone before anyone was wiset.
wiser

The narrator has no name. Naming a character often leads to cluing in the reader as to time and place. A name like (John) would bring a yawn and reveal nothing. A name like Ethel would indicate that the story was at a specific time in history. It's fun for me to find names for characters.

Final observations
The conclusion was devastating, and if the espionage hadn't been so well played out, I would have had sympathy for InterGen Consolidated. I liked the character, which put me on his side, wanting him to succeed. Nicely done.

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Review of My mind, my pain

Review by Nixie🦊

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Rated: E

| (4.5)

Hi Sunnex . Congratulations on your three years of membership. The last time you were here was back in July of 2024. Are you planning on returning?

The Choice
I liked the title and the brief description. I knew relating to what you wrote would be easy.

The comments
You made an interesting observation. It is possible for exhaustion to keep a person awake. There comes a point where finding sleep is pointless.

Each stanza carried the theme without repetition.

The questions
I'm not quite sure what the first stanza means. Should dusty (sheaves) be shelves? Have you ever considered not capitalizing the first word of every line? Especially when it's an ongoing thought.

My mind is going back and forth. Should the other half of the title be capitalized?

Final observations
I was right. Your poem's message fits with the mood I've been in for a while. I'm in admiration of your stamina and determination. The last stanzas clearly demonstrate your strength of spirit.

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#4786585

Review of Poetry

for entry "Untitled (Yet)"

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Rated: 13+

| (4.5)

Hi Cat Carroll. Congratulations on your 11 years of membership.

The Choice
I was drawn in by the non-existent title. Sometimes, no matter how one casts about, no title comes to mind.

The comments
I read through all of the entries, marveling at how consistently dark they were. And I thought my items were dark. You have dominated the genre.

As you requested, I don't think this prose needs to be expanded at all. The words and images are precise and hard hitting. All the disturbing stanzas completely express the narrator's emotions and actions. I can sense that person's glee whey they finally gave in and took care of someone who had long been hurting them.

Suggestions
Sometimes, poems work without punctuation to guide the reader, on the flip side, sometimes it's necessary. Interestingly enough, I read an article today regarding punctuation in poetry. I think this prose needs punctuation. However, I acquiesce to the writer's largess.

Final observations
In only eight lines, I can see into the person's dilemma and sympathize with that person, even though killing is a crime. Disturbing as it was, I enjoyed reading it. You've penned one of those poems that will stick in my head.

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#4786436

Review of Often

Review by Nixie🦊

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Rated: E

| (4.0)

Hi Aisha Akunne . Congratulations on your one year anniversary.

The Choice
The title is simple, but reflects the nature of the prose. I've never understood love so am always curious when someone writes about it. Most works, such as these, reminisce on lost love.

The comments
The formatting threw me off. Free form poetry knows no bounds or limitations, but I still like to see some structure. Maybe all these thoughts came to you in a stream of consciousness.

The hardest emotion to silence is regret. For things not said, for things that should not have been said. The prose mentioned softened, and that makes me worry. We need a hard shell to navigate our violent masses. To be soft is to be hurt.

Personal connection
You mentioned a muse, which is not something I bond with. But then I remember my sister (deceased) and often I feel her (diminishing) influence when writing. She died in 1983, and her loss is profound.

Final observations
I try not to use the word love as a verb, but I did love Vitamin You and his nickname for you. Beauty.

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#4786434

Review of Poetry

for entry "Lost Battle"

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Rated: 13+

| (4.5)

Hi Cat Carroll Congratulations on your 11 years of membership. (Again).

The Choice
This piece called out to me so loudly, I wanted to cover my ears. You're writing is extremely effective.

The comments
The verses are longer than most others, and that was an adjustment for me. I usually lose my way when reading so many lines together, with no pause or breaks in between. The reader has to buy all of the narrator's misery. I had no trouble following this.

Personal connection
In many ways, this could be me. My experiences weren't quite to drastic as shown here. The truth bothers me. We set our own destinations in accordance with our thoughts.

Lapses of attention.
And now I' feeling sorry I'm
Of the one I thought (i was) during all these years I was

Final observations
I've always been the one to walk away from the guy. I hurt them, but, over the years, it's become clear to me that I must be me. Despite how much the relationship destroyed me. I was lucky to get out.

The goodbye at the end is upsetting. I wonder if she plans to kill herself/himself. This time, I decided the narrator was a woman. You've penned an excellent collection here. I'm happy to have found it. Now I will move on. You're probably tired of hearing from me.

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Review of I'm Only the Trombone Player

for entry "Without a Compass Day - What direction are you going?"

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Rated: E

| (5.0)

Hi Richard ~ Thankful!! Congratulations on your five years of membership.

The Choice
Honestly, I have no idea how I ended up here. I've seen the title of your blog before, but that's not how I wound up here.

Point of attack: This specific "Without a Compass Day - What direction are you going?"

was a deliberate choice, because the story of my life is about getting lost. I've been lost on nature trails in the mountains, but there was a cellphone signal so I could call my friend, who was also hiking in the area.

The comments
I liked the quiet humour of being lost at lunchtime. It definitely shows a youngster who is lost. I've never heard of the down/listen advice, and it wouldn't have helped when I was lost on the mountain trail.

Personal connection
My daughter lives 15 minutes from me, but when I first moved here, I often spent two hours driving around trying to find her house. And I had an ancient, monstrous GPS which didn't help at all.

Final observations
The last paragraph gave me pause. I've never experienced a pleasant adventure when lost. If someone (like my brother who can find his way anywhere and knows how to use a compass) is with me, sidetracking is the best part for discoveries. He also encourages me to trespass beyond a no trespassing sign. He tells me that I'll never see anything if I follow all the rules. And we are both adults.

Thanks for the enlarged font and generous white space.

Maybe being lost here on the site and then finding you corresponds to the topic here. Serendipity?

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Review of Walls Could Talk

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Rated: E

| (4.0)

Hi Detective Congratulations on your eleven years of membership.

The Choice
The title is a bit ordinary, but it serves the story, enlightening the reader from the start.

The comments
As I read, I kept thinking, this should be a short story. Maybe some kids making a dare to wander the house at midnight or on Halloween. I believe that would bring the reader closer to the events, where they can directly experience them, rather than reading what seems like a list. Who is there making these observations?

The word choices are provocative and unique to the poem. You have a rich prose to delight and perhaps frighten the reader. Nothing of the sort happened to me.

Suggestions
A few commas are misplaced. Honestly, what's happening inside the manor house is something I'd expect to encounter in an abandoned psychiatric hospital. Of course, that wouldn't fit the ballroom scene.

My favorite view, as I imagined looking through the manor's windows, was the second stanza. There's something magical about waltzing in an opulent ballroom.

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#4786097

Review of Consequences

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Rated: 13+

| (4.0)

Hi Native. Congratulations on your 22 years of membership. You're practically a founder.

The Choice
I've deeply connected to what the title expresses here. Partly because of what happens in the movie "Les Miserables." I endlessly ponder how one man's action led to such a tragic tale. I keep thinking..."If only..."

The comments
I'll admit, I'm not exactly sure what's happening here. So, this is my guess. The unidentified narrator comes upon a scene where a child has been murdered? She's crying, so she's still alive? The narrator must do what he doesn't want to, and kills the man who hurt the child.

The final line really has me wondering who the man is. He has killed people before. Is he some sort of vigilante? Why was he there? Who was the child? Any relation to him? I'm trying to picture the scene, the child above and the man below.

Final observations
I like your writing voice, and apologize for my befuddlement. I feel as if there is much more to this story.

I'll bid you goodbye now, with more anniversary wishes sent your way.

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#4786021

Review of No-Fault

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Rated: E

| (5.0)

Hi Nixie here, reviewing this item for "I Write in 2024"

Wow! That's a powerful beginning. The sound of one car crunching the other is an awful sound. It happened to me a few years ago, and I can still hear it, and it still makes my stomach turn.

The guy was an idiot, it was only a fender-bender. He took me to court, with a jury! My insurance was prepared to pay a costly amount, but the jury gave him only $5.000.
I doubt it even covered his court costs. The man wasn't even injured. Apparently, this was a scam he'd run several times before. No police were called to the scene, no paramedics...there's so much more to the story, but let's talk about yours.

The scene was well-written and realistic. You penned just the right amount of dialogue and narration. The story felt complete and satisfying.

I wondered why the man kept repeating that he couldn't see. The surprise at the conclusion made me laugh. If the food-in-the-face guy saw the license plate, I doubt he would have called the police. You gave me a lot to think about!

Offside comment~ If the state is no-fault, the offender can still be taken to court, as it was in my case. The insurance companies hash it out.

"My client said the crash was midway, so we're willing to pay 50%."

Then the other insurance company accepts, or counters.

Once, I paid out of my own account because the damages were only $500.00 and it was a parking lot crash, which doesn't involve the police.

I don't think the hit and run car will be filing a claim. Food-impaired indeed. That is a consideration, as the insurance company asks if there were any distractions.

I enjoyed reading your story. It was accurate and concise, while still painting a believable scene that was easy to relate to. Flash can be so challenging. You pulled it off with a gold star. Make that 5 gold stars.

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#4785960

Review of Night Terror

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Rated: ASR

| (4.5)

Hi Words Whirling 'Round Congratulations on your six years of membership.

The Choice
I chose this FF story because I was curious. I wasn't sure what to expect. At first, I admired the rhyming scheme, so smooth and rhythmic. And then I delved deeper into the meaning.

The comments
The eloquent stanzas clearly show how frightened the narrator was. He/she seems to suffer from unbelievable conclusions. Night terrors for me are far more disturbing. I felt sad for the narrator who spent a sleepless night, tortured by thoughts of what might be happening.

Personal connection
In the house where I grew up, I heard all sorts of creaking and odd noises, which didn't make sense because the house was brand new. My dad kept reassuring me that that sounds were coming from the foundation settling. I appreciated his attempt to soothe me, but I never believed him.

From there, the mystery intensified. All five siblings and my mom had supernatural experiences that defied explanation. At long last, we learned our house had been built on a sacred Native American grave site.

Suggestions
I have one thought. Should 'eave' be eaves? Eave is not a word. Okay, two thoughts. The word capricious didn't work for me, as it refers to a person, not a sound.

Final observations
I hope this tortured narrator isn't plagued every night with these fears. A person can lose their mind due to lack of sleep.

Overall, a good and inventive write. Now it's time to say goodbye and wish you one final "Happy Anniversary" wish.

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#4785959

Review of A Box of Weeds

for entry "The Artist of Bowness"

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Rated: 18+

| (5.0)

Hi IceSkatingSugarCube Congratulations on your six years of membership.

The Choice
I had chosen another item to read, but then I switched over to your bio page and found this story. This is a comment that should be saved for last, but I don't want to lose the thought. In the beginning and on towards the conclusion, the narrator seems to be down on his luck and lacking funds. In the final sentence my perspective was reversed, as he produced a credit card machine.

The comments
I liked picturing the narrator as you led the reader through his day. He seemed a humble, creative person. I felt proud of him when his creation was clearly explained.

Suggestions
Oh, the limitations of FF. The challenge is, well, challenging, and I prefer reviews where people don't remark on what I'm going to point out. Sorry about this.
I would have liked to know more about the mystery woman in the conclusion. Why was she offering to pay so much? I kept thinking there would be a romantic spark between the two, or some indication that they were connected. Okay, I'm done remarking about what comments frustrate me.

Final observations
Great title. From your bio, I concluded that this story was prompted by who you are in real life. Those life experiences flourish when words are typed. Nicely done!

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#4785958

Review of Feelings

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Rated: E

| (4.0)

Hi Serena Blade. Congratulations on your 8 years of membership.

The Choice
Sometimes, the cover art makes all the difference, and that's the simple reason why I chose this (FF?) story.

The comments
The wording is so formal, and the expression of 'my dear' is outdated, so I'm assuming this story was about an older couple.

Both characters were alive, as demonstrated by their actions and dialogue.

So often people swallow their words, words that express feelings. That can be something good or something disastrous. In this story, saying what the person feels is tantamount to bringing the story to a conclusion.

Suggestions
I've heard the expression: "It's not who you arrive with..." several times before. But it's still effective.

I found several places where the story could be improved, beginning with the second sentence. Wesley's actions and dialogue need to be in a separate paragraph.

One more quick suggestion.
“Really? I don’t know what you mean?” Lulu responded. She leaned her head on his shoulder.
I suggest not using a question mark after the word (mean). Also, it seemed too early for Lulu's intimate action. What about if Wesley moved her head onto his shoulder?

Overall, you've accomplished your objective, and the story was charming. Maybe you were on a w/c restriction, but if the setting had been more developed, the story would have been more satisfying.

Favorite sentence
"Wesley spun her around then quickly brought her back into his arms."
That action never fails to enthrall me. It's abrupt, surprising, but still remains gentle.

Enjoy your anniversary month.

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Review of The Quantum Lift

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Rated: E

| (3.5)

Congratulations on your WdC Anniversary.

Hi Nada Philippe (a.k.a: R.H.N). Congratulations on your 15 years of membership.

The Choice
I've often pondered about the idea of time travel, so this short story was a natural choice for me. However, I have no personal interest in it at all. The title was just right for the story.

The comments
Well...here we have a basic case of telling vs. showing. It's a quick and efficient way to relate a story, but telling doesn't bring a reader into the author's dream world.

Personal connection
As much as I like time travel stories, they directly oppose my general observation that there is no past, present, or future. Intrinsically, this makes sense to me. Based on reality, it makes no sense.

Suggestions
I suggest looking over the rules for commas. Several are present in this piece. The first sentence (the most important) has a comma splice.

Final observations
Using an elevator as a time travel mechanism is one I've never heard of before. That was a great idea. I had quite a laugh when I read the conclusion.

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Review of Fantasy Or Sci-Fi

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Rated: E

| (4.0)

HAPPY WDC ACCOUNT ANNIVERSARY FROM

"Anniversary Reviews"

Hi KnightScribe. Nixie here with an anniversary review to celebrate your 17 years of membership! We have so many long term members, I always feel like a newbie, despite my 13 years. At least I'm a teen now.

You chose an interesting topic for your poll, but I would like to see one that is more comprehensive. I use different descriptions,

There's the question of hard sci-fi fiction and regular sci-fi. I think the genres cross boundaries. Often sci-fi is also supernatural and also fantasy. In regular sci-fi, there is fantasy, because we're writing fictional stories, which requires imagination, i.e. fantasy. That's not absolute, of course.

Poll takers only have two options, though. I have a feeling this is something you dashed off without too much thought and then forgot about it. No big deal. We all have items like that. Okay, not all, if I have to be precise.

Sci-fi is my favorite genre. It's odd. I like to read it, but rarely write it. And if I do write it, there are many elements to include. We need better definitions. Too often, supernatural and paranormal share similarities, and it's hard to choose. The only sci-fi I don't like is when the author includes political aspects. Politics are part of society, and often novels have to address that. It doesn't mean I have to appreciate it.

Oh no! I've prattled on and on. You happened to pluck a string with this topic and I couldn't resist expounding.

Enjoy your anniversary month.

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Review of C-Notes In Living Color

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Rated: E

| (5.0)

Hi Nicki! I did not know you were still active on the website. I miss your image shop. And you, of course. Imagine my surprise when I rediscovered you during this auspicious month. You are a beautiful woman. Your port pic is amazing.

HAPPY WDC ACCOUNT ANNIVERSARY FROM

"Anniversary Reviews"

Anyhow, I'm here to review your impressive C-note shop. I immediately added it to my favorites. As promised, the images are practically exploding in color. All the notes are different, all with useful messages for the community. I've looked at them several times, trying to choose a favorite and failed. All the images are astounding and original, but I picked three. I like the sassy 'Congratulations' note.
And the 'thinking of you' note, and the 'happy WdC birthday' note.

Can I talk you into re-opening your image shop? No. I didn't think so. Have a wonderful anniversary month.

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Review of Nightwind

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Rated: ASR

| (4.5)

Hi ctrhippee. Congratulations on your years of membership. You've been away for so long, maybe an anniversary review will bring you back. We've seen many changes since early 2024.

The Choice
I like creepy or dark stories/poems—I liked the title and the brief description. With a combination like that, reading was unavoidable.

The comments
Although you didn't specify the rhyming scheme, it was easy to pick up on. Did it take forever to get this right? Kudos to you. I wouldn't even try. The spookiness traveled along, as if running on the same abandoned railroad tracks. The beginning and the ending lines give me chills. No one likes creepy kids.

Personal connection
Since the poem is unique in nature, my connection was purely awe at the wonders of what I read.

Final observations
The lack of punctuation throughout was effective. One stanza flowed to the next. I doubt this poem would work with punctuation, and I've rarely seen it work so well.

I'll be on my way now, rubbing chills from my arms. I do hope you'll return for another anniversary review.

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Review of Winter is on my Tongue

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Rated: E

| (4.5)

Hi Detective. Congratulations on your 11th year of membership.

The Choice
The title was the first draw. Its uniqueness captured my attention. The brief description emphasized the theme. I would have liked something more eloquent.

The comments
I enjoyed the repetition of the first line for every stanza. It gave the poem uniformity and consistency. Every stanza was different from all others, no repetitive thoughts here!

A snowwoman? Now that's something new for me. I liked the way you demonstrated her feminine qualities.

Personal connection
Poems about nature are always a welcome site for me. Yours was beautifully composed, and it flowed easily.

Suggestions
This is always the writer's choice, but I'm compelled to add a comment regarding no punctuation and capitalization of every stanza, even though it's an ongoing thought. It's a distraction for me.

Final observations
I'll leave you now so you can continue your anniversary celebrations. Thanks for bringing a bit of winter to Florida.

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Review of Day to Day happenings in my life

for entry "Beauty in aging"

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Rated: 13+

| (4.5)

Hi Sue. Nixie here, reviewing this item for "I Write in 2024"

Beauty in aging has to be an oxymoron. We're in total agreement. In our advanced years, we've lost so much. As you remarked upon, physical and mental degradation.

I'm reminded of this passage from the Desiderata: "Take kindly the counsel of the years, gracefully surrendering the things of youth."

Gracefully surrender? Did the author Max Ehrmann suffer from joint aches and pains? Sagging skin? Forgetfulness? And just plain wrinkles? None of those ailments can be gracefully surrendered. Although, I have met timeless people (like my mom) who never seem to age. She's 96 and I swear she looks younger than me.

You hinted at a question. Medical marvels of reverse aging. Money makes this option a hard no, but I ask myself, if I had the money, would I have cosmetic surgery? If I don't look in the mirror, I'm okay. Seeing my face on my grown kids? That's what hurts the most. I remember that face on me.

Remember placing Autumn leaves in wax paper and preserving them in the pages of a book? Now, I think the veins in my hands resemble the veins in a leaf.

People like to hear positive affirmations, and most like a happy ending. I'm a dark person who resents forcing false positives. However, my recent assessments are in line with yours. A few of my mantras. "Nothing really matters." "I have no control." "It is what it is." "Hopefully sooner rather than later I'll be gone."

What I'd like to leave after I pass are happy memories of who I was, or odd things people liked about me. I think we age faster in our later years—in my case due to the fact of established routines and little or no new adventures.

Well, now I've gone on and on. As to the specific observations of this blog entry, a few comments come to mind--more spacing, larger font, and correcting paragraphing.

Oh, I have two hands. So, on the other hand, I like blogs because people can simply write without worrying. The tone is casual, friendly, and endearing.

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#4784267

Review of The Bag of Bombs

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Rated: ASR

| (4.5)

Hi NaNotatoGo!. Nixie here, reviewing this item for "I Write in 2024"

The title of this Flash fiction drew my interest. And, of course, you were next in line to be reviewed.

When someone told me about the sad part of the movie, I never watched it. I don't like 'sad', unless I need to cry, but the tears won't come.

I know exactly what you're writing about. I have the exact same problem. When I heard the song "Glitter and Gold' performed by Barns Courtney,the lyrics begin with 'I am flesh and I am bone.' Until I set up the captions, I thought he was singing "I am pleasure and I am pain." Go figure.

I can't top 'bag of bombs,' though.

I watched it at least three times in theaters; many more on video tape.
A semi-colon can only be used if both sides are complete sentences. 'many more on video tape' is not a complete sentence.

The conclusion was the absolute best part. Reading your story was my pleasure.

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#4783014

Review of Blogocentric Formulations

for entry "80% Of All Statistics Are Made Up"

Review by Nixie🦊

In affiliation with WdC SuperPower Reviewers Group

Rated: 18+

| (5.0)

Hi Jeff Nixie here, reviewing this item for "I Write in 2024"

Click bait like this frustrates me, so I abstain. We're in complete agreement. I meditate every day, sometimes with an audio book if my brain is spinning off the earth's axis. Why, oh why, does money always have to be included when measuring success? You sealed the coffin. Anyone who's writing and promoting their book with ridiculous and indeterminable promises is only striving for their own success.

The phrasing is always vague and layered, with nothing of substance contained within.

I remember a class from way back in junior high. The teacher asked what our life goal should be. My (written) reply was 'success'. I was over the moon, thinking how smart I was, until said teacher asked me what success was. That stumped me.

And here's my observation concerning money. Money is an emotional state, the constant being 'money'. If we have too little, we worry about not having enough. If we have hoards of money, we worry about losing it. It's always the same. Worrying. Of course, that's a generalized statement that doesn't apply to everyone.

I've never found a book on self-help that helps me. Why? I'm returning back to the beginning. First, why do I have to follow someone else's way to advance? Secondly, I once read an entire book based on self-advancement, and at the end of the book I drew the opposite conclusion from the author's.

We're also in agreement on your other point. Except I'll take it one step farther. It's said we create our own reality with our thoughts, which rings true for me. The idea also terrifies me. Do I have to guard my every thought? I put myself in the situation I'm in, that I am aware of. How to escape? The way out can't be found written or spoken anywhere.

I wandered a bit there. I've always been edgy when reading statistics. One point that annoys me is wanting to know how many people were involved in the study.

I enjoy your writing because it's always precise and to the point.

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#4782009

Review of Poetically Prompted

for entry "Just treat please"

Review by Nixie🦊

In affiliation with I Write

Rated: E

| (4.5)

Hi Pumpkin Spice Sox Nixie here, reviewing this item for "I Write in 2024"

First Impression?
Upon seeing the picture prompt, I thought the animal was a duck. The first stanza identified the character. That's what I get for peeking at the requirements first.

Rolling on:
Aw, how sweet the thought of a dog trying to dress up for Halloween. All the action pointed specifically to the perils it must overcome. The dog losing its disguise was a clever take, as it looked as if the fur was about to slide off.

When it comes to balance, I've done the same. I never really thought about syllable count, but a reviewer used that term to describe my 'error' in unevenness. i.e. I don't necessarily agree with that, but a well-balanced poem is more pleasing to the eye. A writer needs largess to express themselves when writing a poem or prose. But the observation is stuck in my mind.

Lasting impression:
The repetition of 'I want to please' emphasized the dog's desperation. Lines five and six were my favorites because they described the scene in such a way that made me go 'ick'. Well done. Ironically, those two lines are the ones that stand out.

Write on!

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#4779841

Review of The House of Dunn

Review by Nixie🦊

In affiliation with I Write

Rated: 18+

| (4.5)

Hi NaNotatoGo! Nixie here, reviewing this item for "I Write in 2024"

What an excellent horror story. I liked how the action began close up and then expanded into the horror aspect. Write anything about crows and it's guaranteed to cause a reader's fright. Although, some people like crows. Definitely not me.

All your characters were clearly defined, despite the limited word count. Fantastic.
Adding in the reluctance of the door to open heightened the anxiety level. It was almost as if the house didn't want any entrants. And it straight up spiked the fear.

After pausing the recording went through the crumbling stone and wrought iron gate.
I'm not sure what that means.

People worked out that they were dying in Ireland.
I understand the point you're trying to make because I read the brief description. Otherwise, the sentence isn't crystal clear.

My favourite line? The description of Dunn's eyes.

A disturbing ending hit the mark for a perfect horror story. I have to say it was gruesome, with a bit of gallows humour. Nicely done.

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#4778298

Review of ruwth is writing...

for entry "~ This Little Light Of Mine ~"

Review by Nixie🦊

In affiliation with I Write

Rated: 18+

| (5.0)

Hi ruwth Nixie here, reviewing this item for "I Write in 2024"

What a pretty picture you've made into a trinket. I was somewhat perplexed by the length of the item and the reason for why it was written. Then I clicked over to the prompt page for the ah-ha moment. Good job. I can't imagine what would come to mind if I attempted to respond to the prompt.

The title reminds me of something from my past. I was Roman Catholic for a good portion of my life, but at some point I switched to a Renewed Charismatic church. The title had more words, but those two are the only ones I can remember.

Anyhow, people of the Catholic faith didn't read the Bible. It was read to us by the priest. So...when I transitioned, I accepted the position to teach the kids in the church. I rejoiced every time we were together. The funny part? They had to help me learn the songs, and the title of your entry was the first one I learned.

The elegant simplicity of the photo you chose made a beautiful trinket. I liked the last encouraging line. I will try to find my light.

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#4776300

Review of When the light is gone

Review by Nixie🦊

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Rated: E

| (4.0)

Hi Lucinda Lynx

HAPPY WDC ACCOUNT ANNIVERSARY FROM

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I can easily relate to the thoughts expressed in your poem. My summary of my own life goes like this: "I see the world through dark colored glasses." Overcoming this negativity presents a task of monstrous challenges. How much simpler to stay in this state of mind when the truth is the truth. There is no light to be seen.

A few thoughts.
Title ~ When the Light is Gone

The word dark or its derivative is used over and over again. The reason can be to drive home the point. I'd rather find synonyms.

In the first stanza, the third line sticks out and throws off the balance. Also, this line is a bit clumsy and could be tightened. Maybe something like this:
No glimmer of light seeps under my eyelids.

In the same stanza, fourth line, there's no need for the word down. No one can crash up.

Second stanza, third line, comma splice. No comma is needed after 'darkness'.

You wrote this years ago, and I hope by now the circumstances that prompted this writing have passed. Something I like to remind my self is, just because this day is shrouded and tortured, that doesn't mean I'll feel the same way tomorrow. It's never true, but at that moment the thought does help.

The word 'cape' in the last line completes the empty feeling of being alone in the dark. Nicely done.

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#4775128

Review of The one for me

Review by Nixie🦊

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Rated: E

| (3.5)

Hi fote

HAPPY WDC ACCOUNT ANNIVERSARY FROM

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I noticed you're new to the site, so I'll add a small disclaimer, which isn't something we normally do. I am one person with one opinion.

Overall, the poem is overwhelming with all the repetition. My suggestion would be to use 'Are you for me?" only once. Then you can populate the list. Otherwise, most of the meaning is lost, as it appears to be one big bundle of words.

The title should be properly capitalized.
The One for Me

In the last stanza, third line, are you suggesting that a partner should be who you've asked them to be? That's just messed up. We are who we are. Maybe I read it incorrectly.
...after all I've asked yourself to be?

I encourage you to fill out your bio block on your portfolio and bio page so readers have a hint of who you are. As it is now, I'm thinking you're a younger person, maybe even a teen.

Now, don't be discouraged. Keep on writing and grow from here. I know exactly what that experience feels like. I've learned so much over the years.

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