Nixie💃💃's (nixie9) Reviews

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Review Style

Template most of the time, covering setting/plot/characters/conflict/resolution if applicable. For shorter works, I concentrate more on feelings evoked.

I'm good at...

Short story, chapter reviews and in-depth reviews.

Favorite Genres

Sci-fi, Romance, mystery, children's

Least Favorite Genres

Historical

Favorite Item Types

Short stories, novel chapters

Least Favorite Item Types

essay, editorial, non-fiction, somebody's homework assignment

I will not review...

XGC, poems, prose. I am an animal activist and vegan, so cruelty or violent, unnecessary, death due to negligence is overwhelming. I am unable to review any pieces involving abuse of any kind to anyone. I like to keep my corner or the world happy, because I grew beyond my "challenges" of childhood and don't want to look back.

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#4796555

Review of The Snowflake And The Daffodil

Review by Nixie💃💃

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Rated: ASR

| (5.0)

Hi Brenpoet 23 years WDC Congratulations on your 23 years of membership.

Overall impression
Considering the 11 five star ratings, my review and rating will come as no surprise. Still, because death lingers around me, I wanted to read about someone else's experience.

The comments
What we remember after a tragic day is often something simple, yet elegant, as expressed in your poem.

I discovered my favorite stanza was the third, the last two lines.
My life was changed forever (not in a good way) when I found a photo from my childhood.

The rhyming pattern was consistent, although all those commas did distract me. I'm not intending to leave specific comments because this is a personal piece, and after all these years, I doubt any suggestions would be appreciated.

Personal connection
Just a few words here. Anymore and the past climbs over the wall they live behind. My dad and my 30 year old sister. I remember throwing roses on my sisters coffin, knowing they would die just like she did.

Final observations
You handed me your heart in this prose. Thank you.

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#4796548

Review of After the Snowstorm

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Rated: E

| (5.0)

Hi D.B. Congratulations on your 22 years of membership. What an accomplishment. You wrote a review for me, and I like to reciprocate when possible.

The hook
Sometimes it's the small things that make a difference. Not everyone remembers to capitalize the correct words, or I've seen titles with a period at the end. So kudos for heeding the rules.

Personal connection
My favorite line was
icicles hang like magical fangs
The simile created a strong visual. I've always admired icicles and never thought of them as fangs.

One year, my now adult, kids trudged around the neighborhood, placing icicles in their little red wagon.

Suggestions
Interesting. A poem/prose with no punctuation, other than a period at the end. Though punctuation does guide the reader, for your piece, I sat back and enjoyed the flow. A larger font is always appreciated. I use 3.5

Final observations
I wonder what this prose would look like with a few line breaks?
Now it's time to bestow the five star crown

in recognition for a fantastic write.

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#4796341

Review of The Disgruntled Planet

Review by Nixie💃💃

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Rated: E

| (5.0)

Hi Magoo Congratulations on your 18 years of membership.

Overall Impression
I had a blast reading about Pluto personified. I'm indignant on behalf of the planet, now a dwarf planet because it's missing one aspect of classification for full status.

The comments
Sometimes I come across a humorous piece with a flowing rhyming pattern that simply glides over any obstacles of confusion. The reading may be simple, but it's the personification that brings joy and grins.

The inhabitants of earth need to be blamed for far more than Pluto's accusations. And those accusations are not far off based. I'm totally on Pluto's side. Our scientists can easily be viewed as arrogant in this comedic poem.

When Pluto transmits its' message, I pretend that the anger can be heard throughout the many galaxies. Maybe there can be "The War of Planets" against earth.

Final observations
Now I've identified myself as truly nuts. Thanks for the laugh today.

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#4796328

Review of A Day on the Firefighter's Job

Review by Nixie💃💃

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Rated: ASR

| (4.0)

Hi Mac Congratulations on your 24!! years of membership.

Overall Impression
A firefighter story that educates the reader by specifics.

The comments
So, for action/adventure, a whole lot of information has to go out the door.
This is, of course, entirely up to you. For me, rescuing the child was the highlight of the story, but his heroic action was lost in the explanations.

I can't say the details ruined the story because I was interested in the specifics I mentioned. Some of them, anyway. I wanted to feel the rush of adrenaline, but that wasn't possible while I had to read every detail of John getting ready.

Suggestions
I'm wondering why this is formatted as prose, rather than a short story. A short story would have been much easier to follow.

What was up with adding the paragraph stating John Logan was a volunteer firefighter? It sounded like an add-on, when it could have been stated earlier in the story.

Final observations
Even though John is only a character, I was impressed by the way the story ended with him not caring about credit given.

Please take no offense. Mine is but one opinion.

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#4796311

Review of Understanding

Review by Nixie💃💃

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Rated: E

| (4.0)

Hi Dragonfly Congratulations on your years of membership.

The hook
Overall, I think this piece is a fantastic way to recognize and process emotions.

The comments
The visuals are strong, and even though you wrote this for yourself, I bet many can relate to it. Under the heading "I'm tired" all emotions coalesce and each has a spot in your 'vision', for lack of a better word. Once that is established, the piece proceeds to the finality of acceptance.

Personal connection
I don't get angry very often, but if I do, watch out. It's interesting that most humans portray anger using the colour red.

Suggestions
There are several places that need editing. Here's a few for your consideration. I'm not pointing out all of them.

Suggestions ▼

Final observations
I sometimes count to calm myself. Generally, to the beat of eight and then repeat. I also play a mind alphabet game to distract myself.

Finding a way to deal with inner thoughts is challenging. I hope writing yours helped you. 'Exhaustion' is the feeling I'm left with.

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#4795961

Review of Stardust Clouds the Hourglass

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Rated: 13+

| (4.5)

Hi Redtowrite Congratulations on your 19 years of membership.

The hook
The unusual title grabbed my attention and I fixated on it, skipping the brief description, which worked in my favor.I could explore the plot unassisted.

The comments
Cassidiy was a real person in this story, fully developed with strengths and weaknesses. She had the courage to check out the past, and the wisdom to know when to withdraw. In fact, I picked out this sentence because it was unexpected and showcased her practical and astute mind.

“I feel sorry for your wife.”

Suggestions
The opening paragraph/sentences are crucial to engaging the reader. That first line needs some work for clarity. For example: this is a comma splice, separating the subject from the verb.

Donny Lamont, was once her future...

Marked in quotations, this phrase means she's talking out loud. Italics are one way to show inner thoughts. “the only guy I will ever love.”
the only guy I will ever love.

Final observations
We watched Cassidy as she grew from a frightened teen to a mature woman who knew what she wanted from life.

The formatting is off. Perhaps this was written in another program and copy/pasted here where formatting can occur.

Donny was a jerk.

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#4795456

Review of I fall...

Review by Nixie💃💃

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Rated: E

| (5.0)

Hi Princess Zelda. Congratulations on your 19! years of membership.

The hook
There were two draws for me. First, I liked the title, secondly, this is the first 'shape poem' I've ever read.

The comments
The few reads I spent were well worthwhile when the ah-ha moment arrived. Such talented and beautiful work.

Personal connection
I tend to hold back my tears, but as expressed here it's best to release them. Years ago, I was fascinated by the fact that all tears have different chemicals, depending on the reason for crying.

Sometimes, I hold my tears in for so long, that when I say, okay, let go, I can't cry. Then it's time to watch a movie that makes me cry, but that never works because I'm not crying for the right reason.

Right now, I'd like to sob over my current situation, but so far, no tears will fall.

Final observations
My clumsy review is so exquisitely and concisely expressed here, I'm humbled. The form 'forms' an exact tear, and the idea of letting go is such an important message. There's all forms of letting go, especially if one thinks they can control anything that's happening to them. We have control over our emotions and that's it. Tears are treasures we often dismiss.

Fantastic work, more than worthy of a Quill.

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#4795055

Review of June 15--Dog

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Rated: ASR | N/A (Review only item.)

Hi Nikola~Coffee Drinking Lady!. Congratulations on 21 your years of membership.

The hook
I knew this would be a difficult read, but the callousness of the operators was appalling. I've seen dogs dumped from a car into a parking lot, but never so many as in this story. I hope this isn't non-fiction.

The shout out
She had kind eyes and smelled like home.
The story is heavy with aromas, well, stink, deservedly so. The line above was my favorite.

Personal connection
On three different occasions, we adopted dogs from shelters or puppy mills. The first was adorably kind, until it raced toward one of my kid's friends, straight for the throat. I got there on time, thank goodness. The next was horribly sick, but the 'owner' had masked its illness with medicines. When he began bleeding at the nose, I returned him and was accused of not giving him meds. She hadn't given me any.
The same woman sold a dog to my daughter, emphasizing that it was okay around cats. The dog killed the cat.

Suggestions
Oh, just the usual. A larger font is easier to read. This review was written with a 3.5 font size.

Final observations
This is truly an upsetting story, but one with a happy ending that doesn't quite balance out the injustices.

Happy anniversary.

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#4794961

Review of Beware of Scammers and Money Mules

Review by Nixie💃💃

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Rated: E

| (4.5)

Hi QueenOwl ~ A New Day Dawns. Congratulations on your 11 years of membership.

The hook
With so much fraud in the air, no one can let their guard down. I check my bank account every few days, and only a few days ago I found an unauthorized charge.

The comments
Your plight is so awful and incredible, it's almost hard to believe. Never, ever, give out information, and definitely don't react if you're feeling pressured. I don't trust Staples, either. They scammed me with their exclusive virus protection.

Personal connection
I'm excellent at detecting scammers. I also have my phone set to send calls not on my contact list directly to voice mail. From there, I can read the transcription and hear the other 'agents' squawking at potential targets.

Suggestions
After all the years, the tiny corrections needed are no longer relevant, so I won't point them out.

Final observations
Right now, I'm super mad that people took advantage of you. Watch out for Amazon, too. I gave something I bought a low, well-deserved rating. I was contacted via my personal email, which no one should have, and asked to change my rating to a 5 star and receive a $25 GC in return. Then came the sob story...we're just a small business, blah, blah. The seller had over 5,000 5* reviews. They contacted me three times. Note to self: report this type of activity to Amazon.

I don't think I have to add a word of caution here. The matter seems over and done with. I've been urged to purchase something...stock is running low...from a website, and five minutes later, a $200 charge appeared. I called immediately, did the run-around, and had my account credited. Sheesh. What a world we live in.

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#4794599

Review of Tom's ghost story

Review by Nixie💃💃

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Rated: 13+

| (4.5)

Hi Arakun the twisted raccoon Congratulations on your 18 years of membership.

The hook
I tried writing for a campfire only once, because I inadvertently ended the story. I was so embarrassed, I never tried again. I was happy to stumble across yours so I could read a successful entry.

The comments
You kept me enthralled by using the appropriate dialect. That precision added layers to the story. Even though there were no actual descriptions, I built the men in my head, according to the way the story unrolled.

I had to laugh at the dismissal of your character Bill. I bet it made your job easier, only having to manipulate one. We didn't need to hear from Bill and I don't blame the brother for leaving. He had good reason to.

Suggestions

Larger font, please.

How did the brothers survive the cold in the basement? Sure, no wind, but a basement is in the ground and freezing.

I'd prefer not to see (cracks) fully capitalized.

Final observations
I wonder what the secret is to writing a campfire entry. Yours fell right into place. The plot, with a few added details, could serve as a stand-alone story. And that, I'm guessing, is how a campfire story works.

The last line remained as colourful as the story, and gave me a little laugh. Very clever.

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#4794574

Review of The Bradbury

for entry "Young Love"

Review by Nixie💃💃

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Rated: E

| (4.5)

Hi Anni Pon Congratulations on your four years of membership.

The hook
I was curious about The Bradbury, so I took a peek at this entry. I didn't learn about The Bradbury, but I did learn something about the author.

The comments
Oh boy, I can see this drama playing in the homes of so many teens and parents. Controlling a wild child is like controlling chaos. We choose our battles.

When I read that the mom was in the Heraklion region, I found my first clue, and nearly missed it. Without that foreshadowing, the plot could have unrolled in any time or place. Great job!

I continued reading in perplexed wondering, especially after reading
"No woman is worth risking your life."

Personal connection
OKay, a bit of a weird connection here, but I remember my son knocking a painting off the wall as he stormed down the hallway, his head full of teen anger.

Suggestions
Just, wait--” I
Use ellipses to show pause or hesitation. Use{emdash} to show interruption.

He slammed the door to his room so suddenly I had to step back. Teenagers.
If only his door had a lock on the outside. I could keep him here, safe.
I suspect there is a formatting issue because there's a paragraph break after the word "Teenagers."

Final observations
I'm having a hard time not giving away the twist at the end. My eyes widened. What a creative story you've penned.

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#4793105

Review of Walmart Return

Review by Nixie💃💃

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Rated: E

| (4.5)

Greetings, Ichabod Crane I am reviewing on behalf of "I Write in 2025"

. It's my pleasure.

Overall impression
I got the jitters simply by reading the title. Returning items is often an experiment in patience. Or so I've been told.

The story really takes off when the narrator begins to protest. "This is..." The dialogue was appropriate and showed the person's frustration.

The cooperation of the other people waiting was unexpected. So there are still kind people in this world. Daily, the list grows shorter. One day, a woman cut me off. When I challenged her, she said 'everyone does it.' She had a small child with her, and I answered her with 'and that's what you want to teach your daughter?'

Observations/oops
its not what I wanted.”
it's

“Mam, that’s not ours.
Ma'am.

Your not going to tell you can't take it back!"
You're

curtly bid me a good by
goodbye. or good bye.

Lasting impression
A smile more plastic than my credit card
This line was my favourite. I liked the originality, which established the worker's appearance, attitude, and personalty.

I nearly cracked up when I read the conclusion. Well done, and easy to associate with. I bet many readers will align with your issue.

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Nixie

Butterfly Book

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#4793071

Review of Simply C ~ Notes

Review by Nixie💃💃

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Rated: E | N/A (Review only item.)

Hi Mara ♣ McBain Congratulations on your 18 years of membership.

Introducing~~
An eclectic collection of C-notes. Sometimes I wonder if C-notes are still popular among members. The notes are great because they can quickly convey the overall feeling of emotions.

The comments
All the notes vary in style, which I found interesting. I looked at the first one and concluded the collection would be similar. Wrong.

The second note is a flourishing image that somehow made me think of a door mat, as if the sender were stomping detritus from their shoes before entering a home. That doesn't sound welcoming at all. So, I'll amend my statement. The image is simply elegant.

Let's look at all the C-notes!

Next, we're tossed into anime, with a super-cute title.

This sounds so dramatic...the friends forever is stunning, both in message and image.

And then we're back to warm and fuzzy.

The Happy Birthday note is alive with joy and enthusiasm. Unless, a person is like me, one who doesn't want their birthday remembered.

After the yellow congrats, the reader is once again cocooned in the fuzziness of more bear images. Each has its own message.

Final observations
You've quite the collection here. Something for everyone.

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#4793053

Review of When the Boughs Break

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Rated: ASR | N/A (Review only item.)

Hi Nikola~Coffee Drinking Lady! Congratulations on your 21 years of membership.

The hook
The title was misleading, in a good way. The song naturally came to mind, and I held my breath, unsure if I wanted to read about anything where a babe was harmed. Then I remembered where I was (WdC the safe home) and read the brief description. Since memory didn't serve, I had to look up boughs because in my mind, the song went 'when the bough' breaks.

The comments
From the beginning I thought this short would be a personification of a tree watching others falling around it. My heart was slowly splintering, but I had to readjust when I came across the word (aunt). That didn't change the desperation expressed here.

The short also reminded me of people losing other people close to them. Watching loved ones age or simply passing away.

A few years ago, I lost four trees in a storm, and this place has never been the same since then.

Personal connection
Willow trees are special to me because my dad know how much I loved them, and planted one right outside my bedroom window. I liked to hide underneath the branches. Some trees have stood for hundreds of years, and I often wonder how much knowledge they acquire.

Suggestions
Larger font, please

Why is art the first genre?

Final observations
Excellent job, bringing the introduction to the last paragraph, completing the story arc.

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#4792904

Review of Much More Than You Ever Knew

Review by Nixie💃💃

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Rated: E

| (4.5)

Hi Brenpoet 23 years WDC. Congratulations on your 23 years of membership.

The hook
I rather dreaded reading this tribute because it hit so close to home. Leukemia stole my sister in 1984, at the same age as your daughter. My sister was 30 years old. And all these years later, maybe the pain isn't stabbing my heart. Sometimes it's hollow and cold, at other times I feel her consoling me.

The comments
I liked the repetition of the phrase "Much more than you ever knew." But I have to disagree. I'm thinking Lucy felt all that love, although you had doubts. I absolutely cannot imagine losing a daughter. That's not the way things are supposed to happen, is it? When my sister died, my parents never overcame the loss. No one was allowed to speak her name. It seems an unusual response to grief, but I guess you had to know what it was like growing up.

Final observations

I liked the bold font. The simple rhyming was perfect for this tribute. The quiet subtly lent itself to the quiet experience expressed here.

Hopefully, I haven't brought the world crashing down on you. For me, it would be comforting that someone cared enough to read about my sister. Maybe it's the same for you. I'm sure this poem wasn't easy to pen. Where is your sorrow now? A dull ache?

Anyhow, thanks for writing this and bringing my sister back to me, if only for a few moments.

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#4792891

Review of Lost

Review by Nixie💃💃

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Rated: 13+

| (4.5)

Greetings, RatDog. I found your item while cruising through random reviewing.

Overall impression
The title and brief description spelled out what I was about to read. I prefer something more subtle to establish a mystery or curiosity.

From the beginning, I fell in love with the grandfather. The opening scene is meant to be warm, and that's what I felt. I enjoyed reading about his wanderings, despite the confusion. A special treat?

the grandfather connecting his thoughts with memories of music.

Stand-outs
There is someone above the clouds who takes care of them all.
I was already lost in sorrow when I came upon this sentence. In his befuddlement, the grandfather channeled through half-forgotten memories and drew the conclusion. For some reason, I found this sentence the most poignant of them all.

Personal connection
I can't stop the review without adding in a memory of my dad. The family suspected his mind was going, and we received the proof in an upsetting way. He went for a drive and hours later he still hadn't returned. He lost his way, pulled into a stranger's driveway and asked for help from a couple. He was so confused, he asked the husband to drive his own car home, and the wife followed in their family car.

Lasting impression
Although the story was well-told, it felt scanty in detail. Then I noticed this was written for something specific--a chapter. And that made more sense. There's the beginning of the story that can go anywhere. Well done!

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Nixie

Butterfly Book

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#4792325

Review of Did U Say THANK YOU

Review by Nixie💃💃

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Rated: ASR

| (5.0)

Greetings, sindbad I found your item while cruising through random reviewing.

Overall impression
I can't say why I chose to read this article. It has nothing to do with me. But I liked the clear and concise writing style, which carried me through to the conclusion.

What I could relate to was remembering my career from years ago. The worker's comp manager adored me. (Yes, I looked up that word because I only thought of it as applied to the worship of God.)

My manager trusted me with special accounts and printed up business cards for me. All of this was way out of my job description, and my direct manager found ways to sabotage me for years.

Leaders are often promoted because they possess a high degree of skill and expertise in a given area...
So very true...and yes, communication is the key.

I thought the title was unusual, but it does stop the repetition of (you).

Lasting impression
I found your article compelling and informative. I hope someone, somewhere comes across this and sees it as a useful tool. Did you write it for something/someone specific?

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Nixie

Butterfly Book

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#4792039

Review of Sadness within me

Review by Nixie💃💃

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Rated: E

| (4.5)

Greetings, E.S. I found your item while cruising through random reviewing.

Overall impression
"Sadness within me "

is an incredibly tragic monologue. Excellent words choices enlivened the narrative, and I kept nodding my head, thinking "I have similar feelings." This brought me closer to the ideas expressed here.

The flow was natural and, from paragraph to paragraph, unrolled with ease. However, there was no ease in the mental wanderings. I can imagine how many readers would relate to this, and that is depressing in and of itself.

Not one line was repetitive, an impressive feat, considering the topic was consistent throughout. The mood was overwhelming because the feelings ran so deeply, embedded in the conscious mind.

Observations/oops

Two thoughts for you.
It would help the reader if this was written in a larger font (I use 3.5). Also, correct paragraphing would make for an easier read.

The work was marked as a chapter. Is there more to come in your personal saga?

Lasting impression
I have to say I'm sorry you feel this way, even though those words are empty. On a super-personal note, have you considered some counseling to help you through this? It hurts to think of a person out there, alone. One more observation. Consider filling out your bio and port tabs. It makes reviewing easier.

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Nixie

Butterfly Book

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#4792017

Review of Last gasp

Review by Nixie💃💃

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Rated: 13+

| (4.5)

Greetings, Sumojo I found your item while cruising through random reviewing.

Overall impression
What an unsuspected setting! Elderly ladies at a swimming pool? Great job drawing in the reader. A crime concerning swimmers?

Diving in
Excellent work showing us who Dave was. He came across as resigned, melancholy, and sad. The dip into his past, the chlorine reminding him of his childhood, worked as a brief demonstration for rounding out the character.

I had zero trouble visualizing the setting. Of course I can't 'see' the characters, but that's what it felt like. I was in the plot, watching all of them. The intricacies of police work felt accurate and vibrant.

Observations/oops
He Arrived
He arrived

No-one
No one

I have an idea. What about using italics to show feelings? It will bring the reader deeper into your plot-a more intimate relationship with the character.
and he felt he was wasting his time.
What a waste of time.

Title- Last gasp
Last Gasp

Lasting impression
I've never attempted to write a mystery/crime story before. You worked in every detail as the mystery unfolded. I'm impressed. Nicely done.

Respectfully reviewed by,
Nixie

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#4791869

Review of I Like Trees

Review by Nixie💃💃

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Rated: E

| (4.5)

Greetings, G. B. Williams I found your item while cruising through random reviewing.

Inciting Incident
I like trees too. I feel comforted in their presence, thinking about all the wisdom they've gathered over the years.

Observations
Each line adds another layer to the author's affinity with trees. Each line is unique. Here I found many of my thoughts about trees.

Some people struggle to be more, as if who they are is lacking. Society presses this upon us. Do better. Do more. This line expressed the opposite, the truth.

I like trees because they never attempt to be anything but trees.

The reader also finds a bit of psychology for helping people. Generally, we see this expressed as 'choose your battles.' A person can cling to who they think they are, without making room for another's opinion or truism. Best to remember, one person cannot change who the other is.
I like trees because most know when to bend.

Out on a limb.
I prefer no exclamation marks. I'd also like to see, in the last line, LIKE written as like.

The crowning glory
"I like trees because they help me to understand people!"

Respectfully,

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#4791750

Review of CLASH! Tournament 3: Round 2

Review by Nixie💃💃

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Rated: 13+

| (5.0)

Greetings, Jeff I found your item while cruising through random reviewing.

In the beginning
Well, I didn't know what to expect from this story, but I like the way you write and present your stories. Also, I wondered why I was reading a Round 2 tale without reading round one.

Observations
What I discovered was that I didn't need Round 1 to orient me. The plot stood on its own. The writing was exceptional. Fantasy of this sort isn't a draw for me, but once I began reading, I couldn't stop.

Plot/character points
The characters carried the plot and the plot carried the characters. The action/adventure wasn't overly dramatic, but I liked the pacing and the surprises you left around a few corners.

Central to the plot was the relationship between Eldon and Rex. They both obviously cared for each other, but the emphasis was on Eldon taking care of precious Rex. What a beautiful moment when Eldon gave Rex a rest from flying.

Lasting impression
I had my doubts about the wrap-up, the water droplets draining the life force and all that. But Eldon (and you) relieved my concern with the mention of someone who could help them gain back their souls.

One of my favorite lines
“C’mon, boy,” Eldon said, scratching Rex’s scales right under the chin.

I shocked myself by reviewing this, and that's a testimony to your outstanding writing, Jeff.

Respectfully

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#4791642

Review of Signs

Review by Nixie💃💃

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Rated: 13+

| (5.0)

Hi Purple Deep Freeze Nixie here, reviewing this item for "I Write in 2024"

. I think this is the first time your story popped up for me to review.

In the beginning
At forty, I hate to say it, but sledding is not a good idea. But you included the anticipatory glee emanating from your inner child, and that was all the reader needed to catch on.

Buried in snow
Oh, how I miss those snow storms. But, as you wrote here, the downside can be limiting. My entire car has been buried under snow. As a kid, we had huge outside doors in our basement, and they were completely covered.

Connecting the dots
Do I believe in signs? You betcha'. At the moment, I can't think of one, so I experienced yours vicariously. In the meantime, I can relate to the snow. One year, while living n NYS, I had a broken foot and had to dig out my Camaro. The snowplow inevitably arrived soon after and shoved banks of snow against my car. Another year, I lived in Maine, and we didn't even bother trying to uncover our car because we had another to drive.

Adhering to the contest rules
When entering "Daily Flash Fiction Challenge"

there is no rule that requires prompt words to be written in bold. There are exceptions from time to time. My point being, the prompt words slotted in so elegantly, I never would have guessed. W/C was spot-on, which is no easy feat.

Lasting impression
Fantastic write that reminded me of my preferred place to live. I have no doubt that the moment I hit submit, I'll remember incidents with signage.

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~Nixie

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#4791609

Review of Collared Doves

Review by Nixie💃💃

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Rated: E

| (5.0)

Greetings, Beholden. I found your item while cruising through random reviewing. Through "WdC SuperPower Reviewers Group"

I've credited many of your reviews, and I'm always impressed. It's my pleasure to review this prose.

Inciting Incident
At first the title upset me, thinking that the doves were captives, held by a collar by some awful, crazy person. The cover art is stunning.

Observations
The influence of the dove has carried you through your life, much as a good friend, now lost, or a deceased person is held in someone's heart. Even without the cover art, I could visualize the dove through your beautiful description. The Google images I found were not nearly as pretty as the one depicted here.

Mood
The mood was melancholy, and the free verse prose read smoothly, which is a challenge for me.

Word selection
Many fine words were chosen to complete the prose.

'sunburnt veld' had the strongest impact on me.

The investigation
The interpretation of the colors i.e. pastel for innocence, black for strength. Me, being me, I was compelled to Google the dove. I learned they have red eyes and feet. The strength you mentioned may have eluded to their strength when flying. Their flight muscles take up nearly 44% of their bodies. What strength were you referring to?

Looking inside, between the lines.
In the prose, I would interpret the strength as courage or the ability to defend itself (which makes no sense) similar to moths who can change their color according to the color with the bark of a tree. Or the alluring color of poisonous frogs.

Going forward
Of course there's nothing to change now, but, going forward, remember to change the first genre from 'contest entry' to 'nature' or 'experience.' Inspirational also comes to mind.

Lasting impression
Thank you so much for writing this haunting prose. I'm happy your past experiences live on in your mind.

Respectfully

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#4791468

Review of Time passing

Review by Nixie💃💃

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Rated: 18+

| (4.5)

Greetings, Odessa Molinari I found your item while cruising through random reviewing.

Inciting Incident
I was hoping for a slip-stream story, and I found yours.

Observations
Clothing from the 40's is so chic and elegant. The opening sentence showing Charmain choosing her clothing set the scene, though at the time, I didn't know what that might be.

I wasn't surprised by Charmain finding the letter in one pocket. There's nothing wrong with using a letter from the past to further the plot. Sometimes, commonplace quickly orients the reader.

A new character
Wow, Fred had such a volitional reaction to Charmain wearing Irene's coat. That part was precisely what the story called for. We jumped from sweet and charming to anger.
The pace was changed. Charmain's a quick thinker. Confronted by the accusation, I'd probably freeze up.

When Charmain woke, a man in a railroad uniform may have been confusing, except you added the cell phone.

I wondered what "that's one attraction we tend not to advertise" meant. Was the train station a touristy place? The description was beautiful and romantic.

Oops.
"Your not Irene." (You're)
Capitalize 'Passing' in the title.

Something to laugh about. My eyes saw Charmain as Charmin, as in TP.

Larger font, please.

Lasting impression
"You met Fred." clinched the conclusion.

Respectfully reviewed by,
Nixie

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#4791449

Review of Loving the Everyday Beauty of Life

Review by Nixie💃💃

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Rated: E

| (4.0)

Greetings, Ricardo I found your item while cruising through random reviewing. Welcome to the most wondrous website for writers. I hope happiness and a sense of community comes to you, as it has for so many others.

In the beginning
What a grand title, mirroring a few of my thoughts. I live a life of simplicity, a minimalist by nature. Items purchased soon lose the feeling of 'bright and shiny', whereas what we observe and practice becomes part of us.

Observations
Plants. Some can be quite spiteful. I have a plant that refuses to accept water, which insults me. So, I remembered my mom telling me that she told her plants how much she hated them, yet they still bloomed. I used a similar approach, and now my plant is grateful and I am relieved.

Questions
Can you help me understand the following? Do you see why I'm confused?
The Great Snow appears from nowhere. How can I explain this so it makes sense? How does heavy snow relate to a specific season? And why did a prediction of heavy snow prompt you to find the definition of 'great snow.' It was as if you'd heard the term already. I googled 'heavy snow' and found nothing the only mention was the Great Snow of 1717 and other non-related definitions and references.

Thoughts from the ledge
Try using a larger font and correct paragraphing. I was distracted by the presentation.

Lasting impression
What counts the most is the rest of the story. Although loving the family by doing various things was repetitious. I understand, but maybe you could find a synonym or another way to phrase your reflections.

Your descriptions were so vivid they accentuated the exact point you were making.

My mom used to make 20 apple pies at once, and stored them in the giant freezer in our basement. When I asked her how she managed this task, she told me she thought about the happiness the pies would bring when she defrosted and served them.

What a beautiful sentiment sent from your friend. It was the perfect conclusion for the work.

Respectfully

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