Nixie 🦊's (nixie9) Reviews

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Template most of the time, covering setting/plot/characters/conflict/resolution if applicable. For shorter works, I concentrate more on feelings evoked.

I'm good at...

Short story, chapter reviews and in-depth reviews.

Favorite Genres

Sci-fi, Romance, mystery, children's, comedy

Least Favorite Genres

Historical

Favorite Item Types

Short stories, novel chapters

Least Favorite Item Types

essay, editorial, non-fiction, somebody's homework assignment

I will not review...

XGC,

Items that are written in a small font with little or no spacing,

I am unable to review any pieces involving abuse of any kind to anyone. I like to keep my corner or the world happy, because I grew beyond my "challenges" of childhood and don't want to look back.

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#4811135

Review of Our Island

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Rated: E

| (4.0)

Greetings, Just John I found your item while cruising through random reviewing.

Overall impression
"Our Island" is a funny little story that, while enjoyable, seemed repetitious, and a bit unbelievable. An advertisement for a kitchen island was in the window of the bank? There were aerial perspectives?

I understand the need to reinforce the illusion, but the authentication process was over the top. Or, was all of this just a joke from the husband to trick the readers? Introducing the husband as having a drinking problem made the wife's comments a bit more believable.

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Lasting impression
Contests are tough. "Our Island" was a valiant try. I would have cowered. Kudos for making an effort! If you liked the suggestions, then I'm happy to have helped. If not, ignore them.

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Review of Merry Go Round

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Rated: ASR

| (4.5)

Salutations and Congratulations Words Whirling 'Round

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Overall Impression
You're right. Life is a merry-go-round, especially if we strive to catch that ring. We're on the same wavelength here.

The quandary is, do we accept what we see, or do we look in mirrors and see countless images of ourselves, people we could/would/ have been had we made different choices, and send out to the universe the wavelength we want to be in harmony with.

The merry-go-round song is sort of a tortured voice, tinny and grating on the nerves. The harmony is discordant, mirroring life. Your prose (reading inside the words) expresses that.

Emotions evoked
I placed myself at a carnival and looked at the pretty horses. Which one did I like the most? Would my parents allow me to ride again if I wanted a different one for a second time around.

That thought works for life itself, as well. The audio book I'm listening to directs my mind to see what I hadn't seen before. For example, walk the same path, maybe in a park one time. At another time, go back, and see what you hadn't before.

I can link this to movies, but in a ha-ha way. I can watch the same movie again and notice what I hadn't seen before.

Observations
Some of the lines rhymed, or nearly rhymed, which gave me pause to read the prose over again and again, seeing what I'd missed before. The end result is always the same. Why not choose a consistent rhyming pattern? And, now to contradict myself, prose is loosely defined.

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#4811096

Review of Stolen

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Rated: ASR

| (5.0)

Salutations and Congratulations Sarah Rae

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Overall Impression
Outstanding prose creation for the prompt. When I read it, I liked the double meaning. I'm not sure if that's what you intended, but that's the reaction I had. The light within her was stolen (metaphorical). In the last stanza she opened a door to see the light, which could be read as either truth, although ironic, mostly metaphorical.

The more thought that comes to mind, the more I disregard my double impression. If the first part was metaphorical, then the ending must be as well. My thoughts waver back and forth. I'll stick with the double meaning because that was my first impression.

How sad that when the light first returned she found the need to hide it, lest it be stolen again. The last paragraph was triumphant.

Closing remarks
I know who the charmer was in my life. The destruction of me lasted for years, and most of it was never noticed until a catastrophe hit, and the full impact broke me. I work every day to return to my place of serenity. Thanks for giving me a moment to ponder.

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#4810612

Review of The Rose Upon the Rubbish Heap

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Rated: ASR

| (5.0)

Salutations and Congratulations THANKFUL SONALI is happy!

Overall Impression
Your prose was simply beautiful in the telling of a broken engagement. A disaster painted in careful phrasing.

I like roses to symbolize romance, mostly because of the thorns that reveal their true personality.

The first and last stanza are the same for a particular form of poetry? I write free verse, and have no idea of any specifics. At any rate, the prose flowed flawlessly.

If you will indulge me, your prose reminded me of a former marriage. As I read, the same thoughts circled in my brain. It actually hurt to immerse myself in the verses, nodding my head as I continued.

My first husband was so incredibly sweet on the outside, at least in the beginning, but that didn't last long. I stayed married for fourteen miserable years. I'm not a fan of 'lessons learned' to help later. A few years after the first, I married a guy who also treated me badly.

Think about putting that well-deserved, beautiful Quill image at the top of the page.

Stand-outs
Only the thorns are seen
Is this what it looks like,
the ending of a dream?

Closing remarks
I could never throw something from nature onto a rubbish heap, even though we're only talking about symbolism here. I would have to return it to earth, where it could decompose in a familiar environment, among friends.

The repetition of the first and last stanza closed the poem like a tragic book. The phrasing was exceptionally powerful that way.

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#4809805

Review of To The Stranger Who Writes Me Love Poems

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Rated: 13+

| (4.5)

Salutations and Congratulations elizjohn

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Why did I choose to review this prose?

Overall Impression
For some reason, I'm drawn to tragic stories or prose/poems. I'm in a dark place, and here shall I dwell. Happy endings depress me, although I don't begrudge anyone their happiness or their need if they love happy endings to writings. (Note my overuse of the word love. It was intentional.)

Your prose isn't precisely dark. I found it interesting, but not compelling. No emotions were evoked. The poem was beautiful, especially the first few lines. I did have to read them twice. The thumbnail image led me to believe that the phantom could write on a piece of paper.

I liked the consistent no punctuation approach. Do you want to finalize the prose with a full stop?

In poetry, it can be difficult for a reader to connect. Your brief description defines the motive; a response to something sent to you. That could be the reason for lack of connection.

Poems are sometimes personal, like this one, and that can create the disconnection.

Considerations

and you take with you your verse
Rewording this sentence is necessary.

Closing remarks
Please remember, I am only one person with an opinion. Although the remarks above may feel like an attack, I meant no such thing. Rather, I explored my own feelings by reading the prose.

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#4809485

Review of It’s A Mess

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Rated: ASR

| (4.5)

Salutations and Congratulations Whiskerfacebythefireplace

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Overall Impression
I like the honesty and nonjudgmental nature of this piece. It's so easy to look back, or forwards, or in the present, to constantly bemoan our perception of where we've messed up. I've learned that expectations lead to disaster. That's why I write for myself, trying (and not always succeeding) to dwell on 'what will others think' when I'm working on a particular piece. What flows from me stems from some version of personal experience.

It's good that you can laugh at 'prior you' but now I'll contradict myself. I'd still be careful in judging. What made sense years ago may seem foolish now, but it's important to accept with grace and compassion who we once were.

How wonderful and exciting to step out of your comfort zone. I write what comes to mind, and usually delete anything that flops. I created a 'book' set to private where I begin stories/poems or whatever I'm unsure of. I save the mediocre ones because parts of them may be useful for something.

Going forward, consider using a larger font.

Closing remarks
Enjoying yourself and the writing process is the key to keeping one's sanity intact. Your last statement was one I applaud. That's a fantastic cap to complete your entry. You were never a mess. You were who you were. Now you're here being you.

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#4809359

Review of The astral collection

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Rated: E

| (4.5)

Salutations and Congratulations AnaStar

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Overall Impression
"The Astral Collection" story shocked me. The first sentence made no sense at all (good job) and the reader was gently propelled forwards to the conclusion. At first, the story confused me and then I read the brief description that didn't give away the story, but that's when the big ah-ha came to me.

Though it's an unprofessional mark, my overall take was "How cool was that story?"

The mom is a super-mom, taking the items as they come, apparently having done this several times before. Hence the collection.

Oops
All the first letters in the title should be capitalized, as indicated in the beginning and corrected here.

"The Astral Connection"

Closing remarks
Brace yourself for a silly worry on my part. I was dismayed because the mom taped the designation inside the ashtray, ruining the value. All I saw in my mind was a sticky residue.

Such a beautiful and unique story that entertained me as well as it provoked me.

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Review of The cozy chair that I'm not in

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Rated: E

| (4.5)

Salutations and Congratulations

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Overall Impression
My take on this poem was entirely different from the intended message. Rather than thinking'outside' my mind turned inwards. The rocking chair was my safe place, but it's been lost amid turbulent thoughts.

The noises at night while camping brought to mind my terrible and paranoid personality. For me, there's always a creepy noise from somewhere, which I can never identify.

Exploration
The poem begins peacefully, gradually leading the reader towards another scenario. What the husband thought was never expressed to his wife. Therefore, he's responsible for his unpleasant experience.

Kudos for your character who fought against his natural fear of something realistic, so well expressed in the final stanza.

The third stanza is missing a period, in contrast to all the other verses.

Closing remarks
While my take on the poem wasn't expected, I wanted to share it anyway. I like it when readers connect with my work, seeing something I did not.

Congrats on the publication.

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#4809285

Review of An Order of Healers; Prolog to Breath...

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Rated: 13+

| (4.5)

Greetings, Joto-Kai I found your item while cruising through random reviewing.

Reader beware. Walk into this prologue and hope you'll be able to get out.

Overall impression
You pulled me in with the first sentence. It created a sense of quiet unsettling. The words seemed to be positive, but along the way Gregor passes some people who run and hide from him when they see the flower. I think the woman by the side of the road is feared for selling the flowers, but Gregor found his own. I breathed a bit later.

Then I was so frustrated when Gregor couldn't speak his mind. Ismona was clearly waiting for him to declare his love. Men can be so clueless. Or frightened by beauty.

From there, the plot shifts from uneasiness to foreboding. The words chosen created that bleak atmosphere. Honestly, I was scared.

Obviously, the implications of the prolouge are the teasers. I have a few questions, which I'm sure, will be answered in chapters to come. You're off to a splendorous start. If there are more chapters, maybe include a link to the next chapter.

Observations/oops
The deed is done; I don't need your advice."
Missing quotation marks at the beginning of this sentence.

And For you, let it be a delight."
(for) should not be capitalized.

Favorite sentence, and the one following. So graphic, so disturbing.
The words slithered in his memory, into the depths of his past.

Lasting impression
Master Soren alone will live. What is his end game?

A chilling conclusion. Expertly written.

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#4808891

Review of The Old Painting

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Rated: E

| (4.0)

Greetings, Eregnon I found your item while searching under different genres.

Overall impression
"The Old Painting" is a puzzle to solve. Information is doled out slowly, suitable for the plot. The characters are both defined, the guy, of course, has one thing on his mind. Sarah's the intellect, and I liked that she was oblivious. On the other hand, she did go home with him, so it makes sense that both characters had expectations, only Sarah was distracted by the painting, and so the plot unrolls.

If chosen carefully, character names divulge lots of information about the character. I feel sad for Bob and Sarah.

Question: If Sarah was majoring in ancient languages, why did she need an app to decipher the squiggles?

Observations/oops
but it was in no language any of us had ever seen.
On offense, I'm trying to make sense of this sentence and failing. Who is (us)? They've only just met. There needs to be some sort of exchange.

Even if the word (us) was replaced with (neither of us), you're still in hot water, because, as mentioned above, they've only just met. Maybe they can look at each other and shrug. Or he can ask if she can make sense of it, which would lead the reader right into her telling Bob about her education.

Okay, I'm done picking at that confusing sentence, which sort of threw the story askew.

Lasting impression

I'm merely an inquisitive reader, who enjoyed your story so much, taking the time to write this review was well worth it.

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#4808734

Review of New Trouble Arises

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Rated: E

| (4.5)

Salutations Lonewolf. I found your story here. "Daily Flash Fiction Challenge"

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The scene is set in one paragraph with the clever title for the forest. Right away, the reader knows some sort of mischief is afoot.

Overall Impression
"New Trouble Arises" is a feisty little bit of FF, and just plain fun to read. With a minimum of words, the relationship between Darius and Elara gave off vibes of old friends, and possible romantic feelings. I liked both characters from the beginning. Their 'story' led the plot.

The introduction of the antagonist Marlow showed him as a menace demonstrated by a few words. Jagged teeth, unsettling grin...

Do you agree?
Last sentence: I wouldn't use a comma after then. I'd like to state the reason why, but I've lost my notes and can't specifically remember. Or I could be totally wrong. At any rate, it looked out of place to me. No big deal.

Closing remarks
The conclusion wasn't a surprise, but it capped the story perfectly. I doubt this adventure was new for either of them.

If you've ever watched "Firefly" (a misunderstood cult TV series) this plot brought a particular episode in the series to mind.

Thanks for the smile I'm now flaunting. Great write in all the right ways.

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#4808479

Review of Destiny

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Rated: E

| (4.5)

Greetings, Sumojo I found your item while cruising through random reviewing. How do I always end up in your port? Now you have to endure another review from me.

Favorite line
“I followed the cloud,” she explained, “what does it mean?”
That one sentence encapsulates the story's essence. But even from the beginning, the reader sympathizes with her. Six brothers? And poor Sarah is relegated to the work expected from a female.

Had the prompt words not been in bold, I'd never have noticed them. How in the world did you find such a unique plot?

Next, we see Sarah's bravery. She's never rebelled against her circumstances, yet she's not happy with being rated less than. Deep within her is a knowing, and she has no hesitation in beginning her journey without questioning the exact conclusion of her quest.

Observations
Sentence three, first paragraph, is nearly a run-on.

Lasting impression
Being the sister with three brothers, all I have to say is, ha-ha, guys. Little sister exceeded you, yet still maintained her innocence.

A lovely story.

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#4808333

Review of Demon Child (1st Place)

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Rated: E

| (4.0)

Greetings, BScholl I found your item while cruising through random reviewing.

Stacy’s 'mommy alarm' started ringing. Something was up, and she knew it wasn’t good.
This sentence describes every moment of my son's toddler years. I called him my wild child. The title "Demon Child" seems harsh to me.

Overall impression
The first sentence sets the mood (tense) and shouts reader beware. Stacy has a keen insight into Wesley from past experiences, and she's always on guard. Wesley's any mothers' nightmare. A mother of a child like this knows that Stacy's brief distraction spells doom. I like how this sentence neatly slots inside the narrative.

Consider using italics for the first part of the sentence.

That was her mistake, she told herself later.

Observations/oops
I have to release an observation before I begin the review. Why was there pepper in the car?

Also
The windows were all rolled down, but Stacy kept a leery eye on him.
Try as I might, this sentence makes no sense to me. How do rolled down windows match up with Stacy's leery eye?

Lasting impression
Despite my objections noted above, I ended up with a smile on my face. Cute story.
Congrats on the win. Maybe everyone else understood what I could not.

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#4808125

Review of The Great Big Gray Catastrophe

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Rated: ASR

| (4.5)

Greetings maggie Nixie here.
I found your item while cruising through random reviewing.

Overall impression
A fun read and a quirky little poem.

The title is fantastically appropriate. The unique title caught my eye. What happens is still a surprise, but consider not giving away the content by ending with (disappear).

I can imagine reading this story to my grandchildren, when they were younger. If a kid is learning colors, this story would also be helpful.

I had to laugh when the kid yelled (never). It brought to mind my mom's advice, never say never.

You made me laugh again in the 7th stanza. How you showed the kid's reaction was simple and descriptive. Beginning with

I had to leave the classroom...

Observations/oops
The poem could benefit from a once-over to catch minor blips like misplaced commas.

The colours are my friend!
friends

I thought about the words I 'd said,

I'd

Lasting impression
Your poem is uplifting, something we all need as the world turns and turns again, until no one knows what's right or wrong.

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#4807959

Review of Readjusted

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Rated: E

| (4.5)

Salutations and Congratulations Sumojo

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Overall Impression
"Readjusted" is a story which has only seven lines. However, it's one of those stories that reminds us to be concise and remember that less is more. The first sentence is an innuendo, a glimpse into the plot. As the story goes, each sentence builds on the other, giving us a broader picture. I can relate, so, Sue, you'll have to endure a short recollection.

Personal Connection
Freshman year in college, I was dating a guy on the guy's side of the dorm. We had just entered the restaurant, when close on my date's heels was the guy's roommate. Buzz kill. Except the roomie pulled out my chair and charmed me as we ate our pizza. The guy I was dating bored me and ignored me. The roommate was so incredibly sweet, that, after college, we married.

Watch out for those men who spoon themselves into your life. The ones who make you smile every day. My ex is (was) a psychopath who terrorized in subtle ways, until he nearly broke me. I didn't want a divorce. Was I intentionally blind or naive? A bit of both. On top of everything else, years and years of being mentally tortured, I learned he was a drug dealer. 14 years later, I finally divorced him.

The formatting was a bit off. A paragraph after the first few sentences seems appropriate. Was this written in a different program and then c/p over here? That will mess with formatting. Or delete that line break and keep all the sentences together.

(Was) isn't a passive verb. But the many times it was presented seemed redundant. Let me take a wild guess here. Was "Readjustment" written for a specific contest?

Closing remarks
Should the third sentence be the first, introducing the main character, or was it intentionally written to be obscure? The title and brief description fit the story without spoiling the surprise. The title was exceptionally astute and enticing. Very nicely done.

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#4807848

Review of Chapter One

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Rated: E | N/A (Review only item.)

Salutations and Congratulations Dan Hiestand

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The draw
I liked the title and brief description. There's a soft spot in my heart for outriders, (which my eyes at first saw as outliers) or anyone living on the edge, doing jobs that no one spoke of.

Overall Impression
Due to the small font, I nearly passed on reviewing this chapter. But there was enough white space, easing eye-strain.

I admired the presentation, with the dividers so captivating, sectioning chunks of story from one another. One may have questioned why the story began 10 years later, as I did. That small font...words ran together, making it easy to miss something important...why the story began 10 years later.

There is so much material here to dwell upon, it's almost too much to absorb. And there's so much telling...

A suggestion. The second part of the story is far more interesting than the first, which left me unimpressed.

Stand-outs
What an amazing this sentence would have been as an opening scene.
The frozen night sky was on fire, blistering with the terrible beauty of magical warfare and splashing the plain in colors no one living had witnessed before.

Closing remarks
I did click on the second chapter, hoping for some clarity. But by then, my eyes were burning. Seeing that this was written years ago, I doubt another review would be of interest to you.

At any rate, there are nuggets of gold easily missed, too many important details running together. And characters unclear as to appearance and importance. I couldn't appreciate the pecking order of who was in charge. Mostly, I see potential.

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#4807613

Review of Bella

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Rated: E

| (4.5)

Salutations and Congratulations Gratefully IE

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I found something else to review in your portfolio. The title "Bella" was the name for my son's service dog. She helped him deal with his PTSD, so I was naturally drawn to the story.

Overall Impression
"Bella" is a tail (purposely spelled that way. ha ha.) of relationships building between a dog, a puppy, and a married couple. Natasha was my favorite character, although I felt a close second connection to Bella, who knew the puppy was the right choice for her.

Animal shelters break my heart—all those dogs barking and hoping for a home. And once again, we 'hear' from Bella, who mourns the situation.

The descriptions of everything, and Natasha's narration, kept me smack-dab in the scene.

Fantastic presentation with an enlarged font and perfect amounts of white space.

Questions
Carhartts (?)
I had no idea what Carhartts were, so I googled it. The clothing they make seemed suited to cold weather. But what do I know? Consider a footnote or a drop down menu to explain the term for dummies like me. I bet it's a regional term.

Bella grumbles but stays seated, shifting her weight from one front paw to the other.
I can't picture this. Shouldn't she be standing up? Am I missing something?

Closing remarks
Are readers and reviewers ready for a special story to read? Go no farther. You've found the ideal place right here.

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Review of Live it, love it & enjoy it

Review by Nixie 🦊

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Rated: E

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Overall Impression
The optimism expressed here sheds a new light on what life hands us. But it's not true for me. Every morning when I wake, anxiety, with a double x, floods my brain. If that means I'm alive, well, that doesn't mean I'm optimistic and grateful for my life. It means Oh no. Not another day to go wrong.
I'm alive but, due to circumstances beyond my control, I'm not living.

Clothes that no longer fit make me feel guilty that I'm not exercising. The mess around me doesn't mean I had friends at my house. I have no friends.

Questions
Has the world started a new trend? Do we now abbreviate you to u? or "you are' to u r? I'd imagine seeing that in a social media post, but not here, where we're all striving to become better writers.

The fact is that there is no chance of another life.!
Choose either a period or an exclamation mark, but not both.

You will never get out of it alive........
Ellipses are restricted to three dots.

For what it's worth...
The title "Live it, Love it, and Enjoy it." needs correction, as indicated here.

Closing remarks
Nothing I've written is meant to disparage your work. I appreciate the take on finding joy and optimism that overturned depression and feeling miserable.
It's my choice to make a difference for myself. I am responsible for my feelings.

Thank you for your wise words that will inspire people.

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Review of The Bluebird Hotel

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Rated: E

| (4.0)

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Overall Impression
Why did I choose to read "The Bluebird Hotel"? I liked the title.

My mind came alive as I read the first descriptive paragraph. Such vividness in the words placed me there. As the plot progressed, more and more of the hotel was revealed. I wasn't overly alarmed, merely curious and wishing it were me seeing and experiencing the interstices of the hotel.

My alarm went off when the receptionist was described. What was truly in her smile was truly a warning.

Let's talk it out ▼

Closing remarks
The final paragraph was a let down, going out with a sigh, something of little interest to the reader. In the beginning there was more showing that created a feeling of intimacy between the reader and the words.

I would have enjoyed staying in the hotel to draw my own conclusions. It sounds inviting to me. Keep writing!

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Review of Nature's Band

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Rated: E

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Overall Impression
"Nature's Band" is an expressive and unique prose written to delight the reader. I find nature soothing but have never thought about the concept of the sounds being a band. Absolutely beautiful, full of sensory experiences.

The italicized words add an elegant flaunt to the overall appearance. The one problem is the small font. If I read some of my older pieces, the font has not been increased, and maybe that's what happened here.

Anyway, as a demonstration of sorts, at first glance I read
Babies' eyes at birth. and saw : Barbie's eyes at birth.
I knew that made no sense, so I squinted more, until I saw (babies).

Stand-outs
I liked the last stanza for I long to be in a place where no other stands. People annoy me. My favorite 'nature vision' is of mountains and lakes. My dream world left behind when I had to move.

Here, the frogs sing in chorus. Small ones begin, and one by one, the others join, until the bullfrog croaks. Silence hangs for a bit before the chorus begins again.

I miss the crickets' song.

Closing remarks
Thank you for sharing your work and changing my mood from blah to awe.

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Review of Winter in Hamburg

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Rated: ASR

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Salutations and Congratulations Gratefully IE

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Overall Impression
Well, after reading the last few lines, my eyes are burning with held-back tears.

"Winter in Hamburg" takes the reader along with mom and daughter in this poignant story. The characters are equally endearing. I can't choose a favorite. Each one needs the other to show the reader what's being observed. Peppered with emotions, both sad and happy, we're not only traveling with the words, we're riding a roller-coaster of emotions.

I am proud of the daughter, meaning yourself?, for fulfilling her mother's wish. I've always wanted to visit Germany, and with a native speaker in tow, I would be able to avoid all the tourist shops, and instead, visit a more intimate experience.

Having googled Hamburg, the pictures looked far more commercialized than I expected. Americanism is spreading, unfortunately.

The words written in German are translated in the foot notes. I know a bit of the language, and surprised myself because I understood most of them (or their intent).

The font size and generous spacing make this an easy read for everyone, and also for those of us who are old(er).

Stand-outs
I laugh at her excitement over a good cup of coffee, but that’s Mom for you.

Closing remarks
I want to thank you for the marvelous word journey because I'll never see Germany for myself. I have a feeling you'll win a Quill for this beautiful story.

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Review of Paige and Donnie

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Rated: E

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Overall Impression
"Paige and Donnie" promised to deliver a powerful tale. The vagueness gave hope. It's a sad story that desperately needs dialogue. Rather than telling a story, the reader likes to experience the story. They want to feel as Paige felt.

Donnie is a secondary character who is also sadly lacking. Who was he? What did either character look like. Show us how the couple interacted.

The first paragraph is a non-starter. The sequence makes no sense, and there's nothing exciting going on. Nothing to urge the reader to continue. All writers have is the opportunity to snag the readers attention in the first sentence or paragraph.

Oops
Fourth

Noone was around > No one

Fifth

All punctuation inside quotation marks.

“You are coming with me, Paige”, >
“You are coming with me, Paige,"

and think about the trouble you caused”.
and think about the trouble you caused."

Closing remarks
You have a valiant try here. Going forward, if my ideas work for you, try and try again. It's our oops-es that make us better writers.

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Review of Rain's Healing Sound

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Rated: E | N/A (Review only item.)

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Overall Impression
"Rain's Healing Sound" is a beautiful and informative poem. I hope it's okay to write informally how much Native Americans fascinate me.

The cover art is poignant and spiritually moving. I wonder what this poem would look like if the full image was at the top. I'll admit it's a wondrous surprise to discover the image at the end of the poem.

As a kid, we lived in the Mohawk Valley, in NYS. Spooky occurrences happened all the time. All four of my siblings, and even my parents, experienced supernatural times that couldn't be explained. My memory is sketchy, but I think my dad later discovered that our house was built on the Mohawks grave. To this day, I feel awful about that.

Stand-outs
This sentence makes so much more sense to me, sidestepping some traditional beliefs.

Traditional drummers sing love notes to Great Mystery.
Echoes of trilling travel to the skies, as a plea for life's harmony.

Closing remarks
I find the rain to be healing. I don't even carry an umbrella. Rain is like a gift for me. Thanks to you for expressing my thoughts so movingly.

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Review of a gentle collision

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Rated: E

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Overall Impression
"A gentle Collision" may be a small story, but it packs a punch. Little moments do matter, even if they create a small ripple. You chose a real live experience to write about, and the intimacy was cranked up a notch.

The story is a bit on the sad side, but that's okay. If a person thinks about it, the truth is in the words. Some readers may not react positively. Also okay. To each his own.

Golden retrievers are the sweetest of dogs. We had one when I was a kid, and we had one when my kids were kids. Her passing left a hole. (cancer.)

Suggestions
In the opening paragraph of this review, notice the capitalization of all the words in the title.

The way this sentence was written is a little challenging to improve. The punctuation is outside the quotation marks.

I looked back at the girl and she was sitting on the swing next to a somewhat older boy, her brother?, and she had a very serious look on her face.

Here is one possibility.

I looked back at the girl, and she was sitting on the swing next to a somewhat older boy. Her brother? She had a (delete very) serious look on her face.

That sentence has some implications. I wonder why her expression turned serious?

Stand-outs
The ripple of small joy, for both the girl and the dog, was gone. And likely forgotten. But so was my funk.

Closing remarks
These little moments change many things. A small gesture between your dog and the child uplifted you from your funk. Keep writing.

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Review of The vampire jellyfish

Review by Nixie 🦊

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Rated: ASR

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Overall Impression

wow! What potential "The Vampire Jellyfish" has with some changes that I'll demonstrate. Hopefully, they'll help.

The jellyfish is a frightening creature to be avoided. That much is clear. I felt (as I always do) for the evil monster in a story. There's no mention of anyone trying to kill it, I could only experience the plot through the words.

The reader wants character reactions and conflict. You have an abundance of material here to build on. Rather than telling the reader about the jellyfish, why not show some interaction? Show it steal and devour a villager. That danger is listed, but what a shame that we don't see through a character's eyes.

Rather than telling us about it lurking near fishing boats, this can be translated into a terrifying event. What if a fisherman fell overboard and the jellyfish ate it, leaving a red mist in the water? No need to be overly graphic, show us the fellow fishermen screaming and trying to save their friend? Is there no hope?

Closing remarks
Where an you go from here? Writers have a specific job. Show, not tell. Bring your reader into the story. Make them care about something. Add in some dialogue.

Don't be discouraged. Try again. That's how we learn.

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