Dear Kotaro,
I like your imagination.i like the twist in the tale too! I liked your characters and their flights of fancy.
I know that there are too many 'nice' in my review, but, I found your story very imaginative.
I think option no. three is the best, because it saves a lot of energy and time.
Unfortunately, as far as life issues are concerned, I tend to ignore the elephant in the room. I guess, it sometimes is a safety mechanism. When a problem is too big to handle, too big to be swept under the carpet, it frightens me and I, or all of us tend not to look there.
Issues like this are better solved if one has a dialogue.
Jeff, I think your posts are uninhibited.I always hesitate writing about my personal likes and dislikes.I have just registered some stories on a screen writers' site.They are based on Jain fables.
Since you mentioned crossover genres, I could share the link if you are interested.
I think that the same feeling could come back when you have done studying.
No, really, you have captured the intensity of teenage romance well.
regards,
nwriter
Hello Lucy,
That was beautiful.I always respond to writing that is spontaneous and sincere.It is nice to know that a dreamer is not always spaced out but can relate to the world, specially on this site!
Regards,
nwriter.
Dear Rose,
I can almost feel the pain.I can imagine what you must have gone through.
As far as literary merit goes, the verses were totally inspired.
Yours Truly,
Nwriter
Dear Escapism,
That was one of the most brilliant piece of work that I have ever read.I hope you don't mind the fact that I have shared it on twitter.
Regards,
Nwriter
Hi Lightspeed 555,
I thought your Downfall of Stars really well written. The last line was really the one with the twist. I particularly liked the way you explained the science so easily.
Yours Sincerely,
Nwriter
Dear Sethisawesome,
You have really said it.Your piece shows a reflective mind and you have correctly gauged a middleaged woman's feelings.
Of course, technically there is nothing wrong with this.
I have written a lot about brands, so am really impressed with your analysis.
Sincerely,
nwriter
Hi,
It's quite heartrending.I have never been exposed to any kind of martial experience, so it particularly seems frightening to me.
Yours Sincerely,
Nwriter
Hi,
Reviewing can be daunting sometimes, but it helps your perspective as a writer.
This item was really helpful to me.
Thank-you.
Yors Sincerely,
Nwriter
Hi Takari,
That was really exciting-it did not lose its pace even once.At first I felt that it was a little too descriptive, but the action did not fall behind.
Very imaginative and I definitely want to read more.
I too have written a few chapters but did not get down to uploading them.
you are going to have a tough time keeping up with later chapters.All the best.Will keep reading.
hi,
I am glad that you have got back to writing. you are passionate about something-Writing!
I too got back to writing after my children grew up and became independent.This was before the internet.Now suddenly writing is way more exciting!
I just attended a literary festival,and found so many of the writers talking about their family and it's influence on their writing.Just last night I saw The Descendents on TV and guess what? The whole script was based on family history! We take our family for granted but their behavior is always interesting to others.Think Gossip!
Sincerely,
Nwriter
I wrote a review before, but it went off somewhere in space.Anyway, I'd like to say that that was actually a very profound thought expressed in a poetic way.Makes you sit back and reflect on life, which shows that it is a good piece of work.
All that turning and bowing reminded of all the period romances that I have read. I have just finished reading Philipa Gregories' book about Mary Stuart.I know that you did not intend it, but it so summed up her life as written!
I think it was Oscar Wilde who said that youth is wasted on the young.
hi Amalie,
This was a bit overwhelming for me, a very straight woman living with her two sons,daughter-in-law and two grand daughters together with my husband.A situation like this would be rare in my neighbourhood. At least in my 57 years, I have never encountered anything like that before!
I will try to be as objective as possible.
Now, as far as the prompt is concerned,it does fulfil the prompt.Only, I found it a bit contrived-the daughter being gay,the husband being a cop.
Then too, her love for the politician seemed to be her first love.The way she responded to her ex gay partner's announcement was strange, specially her insensitivity to her husband's feelings, and the way she let him know her past. She totally trampled on his feelings, so then all three hugging makes little sense.
Your language skills are spot on.I like your dialogues too.
hi Darrin,
I agree with you completely.If the beginning fails to grab the reader's attention, it is very likely that reading will stop right there.You have shared all writer' dilemmas-to get that all important hook.
Here's one from Gyan Prakash's The Mythic City, from Mumbai Fables-it is just before two o'clock in the afternoon in April, the hottest month of the year. A tiny speck appears on a cloudless poona sky, moving steadily toward the Tower of silence, the funerary place where the Zoroastrians expose their dead to be consumed by birds of prey
Getting attention is right up there where it counts when you put your first line on paper.
Technically, your item was flawless.I'm glad you gave examples.
Sincerely,
nwriter
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