Great short story, I enjoyed it. Your writing is clear and easy to read. My only feedback is you ended pretty quickly, I wanted more also, your technology descriptions were good, would he fun to read more about "First Contact" protocols.
This story is an interesting allegory to purgatory, hell, and heaven. I like how the characters are exercising free will, however, the paths feel predestined. What do you think about spending more time on the named characters and how they choose which boat to board, e.g. how the Samantha and the other three passengers fall in with each other. It would be interesting to discover good vs. bad choices.
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also, your technology descriptions were good, would he fun to read more about "First Contact" protocols.