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Review by Gaius Marius
Rated: E | (3.0)
Whew! Ok a heavy subject especially for those of us that can identify with such a condition. But what a fantastic reference you use regarding the colour yellow! "Yes is a yellow word" I absolutely love it, it's what drew me in.

I'm guessing a story such as this and in the form you have chosen to use "reflection" is an intensely private thing. I am currently exploring a similar aspect but my format is very different. But this is not about me, its about the way you have placed thoughts down in the manner you have chosen.

Your audience would be a select group, you know what i mean when regarding depression. But keep it up as others who can affiliate with your world gain from it.

A pleasant read and inspiring use of fabulous descriptive language.

I think i will use the colour scale...love it.
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Review by Gaius Marius
Rated: 13+ | (2.0)
Sam, the last sentence my friend.
"she knew that she dead?? Im guessing that was an innocent grammar mistake?

In my experience you can loose a reader in an instant like that with a simple grammar mistake or misplaced word.

But its an interesting start to your story, well for me it is.

Cheers
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