I enjoyed this story. interesting characters, conflict, well written. The only slight thing I can take away form it is that a few times you had repeated consecutive sentence structures. Like in the beginning - The space, The pervasive gloom, The images. Also one or two time's you did - Pronoun then a verb repeated. Minor issues at best and easily corrected.
Your writing is vivid and evokes a certain sense that lends itself to reading on.
Keep up the good work.
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